eamon byrne

Eamon, thanks for comments on Obligatories, and for taking time to read. I do appreciate your take, and tend to agree that the repetition is a little much. Maybe one day I'll see if I can trim it up a bit.

Thank you for your continued support of my work, eamon!

Thank you for the thoughtful notes on Ilex Cahokia.

Yes, the Diamonds in the Fog comments are somewhat cryptic. I imagine even you can't decipher them...

your last review, o'boy, idiot!

Thanks Eamon for reading my work and your kind words on Pastoral Hide & Seek! Look forward to checking out your work!

Re: Hypochondriasis. Glad you liked it. Didn't quite understand the question, though.

Eamon, thank so much for reading my story. It's interesting to think of myself as using the conventional techniques of fiction, but of course I am. It feels like years of journalistic feature writing have landed me there, and it's not a bad place,really. But I started out as a prose poet, something I'd also like to explore again.

eamon, you continue to inspire and validate my writing on this site. thank you for the kind words.

Thanks for your considered comments, Eamon -- if I ever write Chapter Two, it's something to look out for, the italics thing -- and perhaps at that point I'll go back and look very closely at my liberal dispensing of italics in Chapter One.

Thanks so for your comments on "Madwoman." I am following you and looking forward to reading more of your work.

Thanks for your comments on my stories, eamon. I really appreciate your insight and attention to the stories.

thank you, eamon, for your comment on "fox". i've used this voice recognition technique actually. this piece also poured forth, as the little buggers sometimes do. your observations are fascinating to me.

thank you for the careful reading & commentary on "before the bloodbath". great analysis—and i really liked "metronomic rhythm". active verbs, i suppose lead the reader outside of the scene, so if you want to keep 'em close and personal, this is a way to do it. of course this is not something i know or even realize while writing...

Eamon, thanks for reading Tool and leaving your comment, I appreciate!

Thanks for your thoughtful response to "Getting Godless," Eamon. I particularly like your Futurist manifesto reference. Since I love Marinetti, I take that as high praise. All your comments were insightful as well as helpful.

eamon, you are a challenging writer and commemotator, thank you for your words and your attention! Peace, Amy

Eamon, i tend to like micro shorts, and post modernism is a fav of mine too. I dont know if they will ever be longer, Although my hope and prayer is that I will one day write a longer peice, ie winesburg ohio is a favorite of mine. Thank you for your comment. Peace Amy

Eamon, thanks for reading and commenting on "Calibration." Just noticed your comment there. Good to see you about here.

Thanks, Eamon, so glad to see you're still following this piece. Another aspect of revision--and your point was well taken,by the way-- is that I often revise pieces while they're up on fictionaut, and in that sense everything I do is a WIP.

Eamon,
Thank you for taking the time to comment on my piece, Rue Saint Maur, 3:14am. I always appreciate any and all suggestions, so I made some changes. I appreciate it.

Thanks for your kind and generous comments on "Remember Me to the Motherland." Tense is actually my weak point, so when I wrote this (back in '05), I deliberately set out to write it in the simple past, as if the reader was already in the future and had unarchived a past relic.

You are perceptive reader, and a sensitive critic.

Hi Eamon, thanks for reading my snail story, and thanks for commenting, too. foster.

Thanks for stopping by.

I appreciate your considered analysis as well as your generous assumption that I am serious about half of the time. The truth is that I am completely full of shit almost one hundred percent of time.

Godspeed, Chris

Thanks for the very considerate, close reading of The Octopus, Eamon. I have been very interested in collage lately, along with the saturated, de-stabilized, liquid self. I always look forward to reading your comments.

eamon, thanks for reading Teacher. I enjoy your insightful comments wherever I see them posted and I particularly appreciate your encouraging comments on this story.

Thanks for your comments on American Dream, eamon. Very appreciated!

Thanks, Eamon, for your considered response to "Nanette 6".

I don't consider good writing wasted on the material (this or any other), though there will always be those who make value judgments about the characters. Nanette, the POV character in this passage, is not a street-level crackhead-type whore, like you will encounter in your Vollmann (and good luck getting through that), but rather a call girl. More to the point, the call girl that the other narrator, X, meets at the beginning of the overall story.

This story, in total, is now moving into the area of metafiction: Nanette, it turns out, is actually the author of X, at least to a very large and mysterious extent.

Context is very important to this, whether or not I here romanticize Nanette. There's a lot going on with her: student, daughter, writer, and call girl, all of it coming into conflict in this chapter. And in New York, you will find, the quality of call girls is such that they are indistinguishable from other thr

Thanks, Eamon, for your thoughtful read of New World. And of course you hit it on the head; I think it could either be shorter or longer (I'm tending toward longer -- I like the 40 weeks, as compared to the 40 days/nights). I am also interested in keeping some of the ambiguities alive, maintaining some of the mystery in the piece, but I appreciate the critique you offer and see how certain parts need more explication. Will do a round with draft two soon... Thanks, as always, for your carefully considered feedback.

Eamon, just wanted to let you know how impressed I am with your commentary on about various pieces up here.

Thanks indeed, Eamon for the very kind comments on "The Warden". I have a very high regard for your opinion, good or critical, and words like these waft me back to the keyboard with delusions of novel dancing in my head.

Glad you liked "Greyhound." Thanks for commenting. Yes, the allusion is to "Prufrock."

Thanks greatly, Eamon, for the cogent remarks on "Pacific Light" and the kind ones on "See?" Always good to have your searching eye play across my work.

Hi Eamon, thanks for your comments re "Chelsea 4", which I appreciate. In all honesty I don't know what this story is turning into, only that Fictionaut is getting first crack at it because I'm posting as I write. And the narrator/protag is not supposed to be a victim, btw, instead faces consequences of his own actions, and experiences self-pity for not facing them. The realization/epiphany/climax you refer to is coming in Scene 5. I'm glad Sc 4 inspired you to read the other parts.

Eamon, thank you for your thoughtful comments on 391! As always, you are spot-on. I've always had certain issues with punctuation, especially commas. Thanks for your critique, and for pointing out specific areas to work on, I found that to be immensely helpful.

Eamon. Thank you for the thoughtful comments and perspective. It was a nice, concise critique. I did what to address the 'unbelievableness' of the buckets and numbers. They are just little known orinthological facts. I researched on Audubon and a few other college sites that conduct studies of this phenomenon. Scientists have conducted interviews with janitors and streetcleaners who clean up the nightly slaughter. The numbers are higher during peak migration...(we)humanity rarely sees it because 'scavengers' have scraped the pavement clean.

September! Yes - this is a metaphor for 9/11 & also why I again referenced birds dying by the thousands from 'window hits' & the process of cleaning up those remains, post 9/11.

Thank you again for reading, commenting & pointing out some areas that may not be as convincing in this piece. It gives me something to think about as I work.

Hi Eamon,

Thanks for reading the naked man of barcelona and for your thoughtful comment. sincere apologies for the late reply. I'm still learning my way around here.

Cheers

Thank you for your excellent read of Celebrating Difference. I am thinking on all those things, and I agree with so much you say. I really like the way you pick up simple things too, like the need for subtlety in the beginning -- giving away my position with "delicious" too soon. Appreciate your insights and your care so very much.

Eamon - I truly enjoyed reading your comment on Ann Bogle's Brock and Cheryl - you said it so much better than I was able to and gave me some food for thought to boot.

thankyou very much for you kind words about "Lost" - greatly appreciated.

Eamon,

I have netflixed Cracker!

eamon, the prize scheme invented for "fungus" was a short-lived strategy to lure more writers to my comment section. it didn't really work. writers evidently are incorruptible? i bestow upon you the prize of the late bloomer. please accept now or else i must mail it to you.

Thanks for reading Urumqi. I glad you liked it, even with the last line. However, don't read too much into it. The last time simply means the men died. Just another way of saying it.

Eamon,
Thank you for reading and your lovely comments. I'm glad the italicized dialogue works for you, I've been using it a lot in the stories I've been working on. Thanks also for liking my syntax! I don't know Jimmy McGovern's Cracker, what is it? Have you see The Wire in the Blood? Or Trial & Retribution? Both are British TV series.

I see I have lots of your work to take a look at.

Cherise

I had responded to your post, but didn't realize I ought to be posting on your wall. Thanks again!

Thank you so much for reading "Picnic" and also for your warning about public parks... ha!

hello eamon - thank you for your very kind comment on my story, martha.

My gratitude for your close reading. I responded to it via the comments on the story itself (myself still reposing upon the novice title of how this thing works).

What would Talleyrand make of this site? What would you make Perigord de Talleyrand make of this site? I'm fascinated by him . . . to listen, to flatter, to triangulate, to disrupt and befriend, to ignore, profit, betray and ultimately to survive. That's what's on my mind. Talleyrand.

I remember you more for the certainty of your impressions and your well wrought criticism than anything else. You, sir, elevate criticism in this forum. It's rare, and for those who make efforts at writing, it's imperative. Maybe you should start a group called the critics corner where your posts are nothing other than critiques. We could then refer to the original post and reflect on them. Why don't I? I'm not as voluble, and I don't have your imprimatur. warm regards, jn

Did I thank you yet for your kind "Snowsuit' comments?

Very best,
RR

Enjoyed your comments to Reader's Ingest, Mouth Theory!! I read your year zero and it was moving. It's like the reader is there on that bus and that place. How did it all get there? The anger, the retribution, the perceived injustice. Is man marching forward into the abyss? Your piece certainly gets one to wondering?

Tried your suggestion for cleaning up the format on the one just posted. You're so right. It came off much better than before. I'll do the same tonite on the earlier part. Thanks again...

Re: "Quitting." Oh, yeah, the real life counterpart has her wits about her, too. Believe me, she can defend herself.

Eamon, I really appreciate the comments made on The Etymons. Any further critique is welcome.

and 'byrne'...from 'o'byrne'...that's irish enough to qualify for The Paddy Day challenge (see group 'The Paddy Whacker') - join us and give us the unique aussie perspective on all things paddy!

Thanks for your thoughtful comments on 634, Eamon. I really appreciate it.

thank you eamon for your kind comment on "rose petals". 'is don', too, on "year zero" and i enjoyed looking at your site as well - put something in your author's note here, why dontya, you got so much to share. max beckmann! finally! welcome to the fnaut, mate.

Thanks for your nice comments. I enjoyed the haunting prose of Year Zero.