Jon Davies

Thank you, Jon - hope all is well!

Thanks for your comment on my "Bumper Repair," Jon. I understand the reluctance of many to embrace nano/micro-fictions. I feel that some of these works can veer toward the gimmicky. It is a challenge to make the form work well suggestively, as in some hint fiction, and I'm glad my piece appealed to you. Cheers!

Great comment on "The Bed", Jon. Always love getting your feedback. Thanks!

Thanks for comment on Reginald #1

Hi Jon - It's been a while :)! Thank you so much for your nice words on "Christina Heppel" - hope you are happy & well!

Hey, Jon. Thanks for your comment on "Rugby Poets of Suburbia."

Thank you, Jon, for the read and kind comment.

Thanks for your comments on "So You Want to Write a Screenplay for a Children's Movie," Jon. Much appreciated!

Thank you, Jon!

Hi Jon - Thanks so much for nice words on "Nothing Good..."!

Jon, thanks for reading and commenting on my story. I appreciate it!

Jon, thanks for the read and the comment on "Foreplay."

Thanks, Jon. Read all your stories. Good stuff there, man.

Jon it's so nice hearing from you and thanks specially for liking "oasis"

Thanks for commenting on 'Highway Robbery' - I find few people read (and comment on) my longer pieces, so your diligence and attention is appreciated: you made it to the end!

Thank you for your kind words about "Sundays." They are much appreciated!

Jon, Thank you. You're too kind.

Jon, I appreciate your reading "Wake Up." Thanks for the kind words.

Characters is right. Thanks for the note re: "Secrets."

Thanks Jon, much appreciated.

Jon:

Thanks so much for your kind comments about "Real Estate." I appreciate it!

Bonnie

Jon, thank you for your kind comment on Tears of a Trucker. Martha

Jon,
Thanks once more for the solid thoughts on Movie Stop. I'll try to return the favor soon.

Nat

Hey Jon, thanks for taking the time to read and comment on Eight States Away. Yes, airplane travel has changed quite a bit...

Thanks for the comment, Jon. I haven't given up on the prompt. Tomorrow.

Jon- thanks for reading and commenting on "Favilla", appreciate.

Jon, Thank you so much for reading -- and responding to Girl. I really appreciate it.

Hey Jon, thanks for your comments on Invisible Grime - I'm happy you liked it.

Jon, I appreciate the comment about "The Birds"; glad you liked the micro.

No kidding, please let me know your PayPal info so I can wire you some cash. There is no way you can consistently provide the reviews you give in the workshoppy group de gratis. You make so many great points about "Late Bloomers" that I don't even know where to start. I feel sort of "cheap", like I'm posting drafts just to get all of your amazing insight before I proceed to the next version. Well, I know how I'll be spending my weekend. Oh, and it's really interesting to hear you took the narrator to be the hair-puller's father, not her husband. That has given me a lot of stuff to think about. I think this story may work better with the narrator as her father, not her hubby. I had just left it sort of vague, meaning the narrator to be some ninnyish husband who just sits by while all this stuff happens at home. But I like the idea of a father "dealing" with a daughter who is "dealing" with her son's neuroses. THanks again. D

Thanks for the kind wall post, Jon. I'm trying to step up my comments/editing game, looking to folks like you for inspiration. I never want to be one of those people who "hates" everything (or gives the impression from the comments) but, especially for stories looking for homes, I'm really trying to provide any assistance/insight I can (rather than just saying I like it).

Ha, John, funny wall post. Look quite forward to your Battered Suitcase piece in June. Without intending to sound sycophantic, your reviews in the workshoppy group are some of the most generous (with your time/insight/focus/questions/suggestions) I've ever seen. You are pushing me to become a "better" editor, or at least one who spends more time on each story before dashing off my thoughts.

Jon: Wonderful edits, both. You're right, the "ominous" line is too much (and takes away from "you can't know that"). The direct quote from the kid about the house exploding is also problematic. I wanted to show it "in scene" but it actually doesn't "sound/feel right to me either coming as dialogue.

I can't thank you enough for giving all three story iterations such close readings and providing wonderfully helpful edits. You make the workshoppy group a great place to be. David

Hi Jon - thank you for reading "Shallow Grave" -- realized I should respond to your Q here rather than in the comment thread: I've been thinking about the 'man on the street' comments re. tragedies such as these or the response of the community when tragic events occur. Community members vs. actual family members. My note probably could be clearer, I think. Thanks though for asking.

Thanks for taking the time to comment on my workshop story, Jon. Exactly what I needed to hear.

Hey Jon, thanks so much. Yeah, I took it down for now, thought it might be a little to close to the publication date (just last week). Wish there was a way to make stories only available to Fictionaut members... I'll re post soon. Really glad you enjoyed it!

Wow, Jon. A great compliment on "Peach," more so coming from you. Last lines are a bitch to write sometimes, so thanks for digging mine. Who knows where they come from--ether, sweat, fog?

Jon,
Glad you liked my "Picnic" series. As for how the stories go together, your guess is as good as mine. I do it by feel and not by design.

Jon,
Thanks for the thumbs up for "The Jumpers' Pool."

Oh, don't worry. I stopped writing well at least six months ago.

really enjoyed your various blogs and sites just now...especially the late 'my week in hair' (for obvious, sad reasons, comrade). noticed your double emphasis on 'immigration' in your profile and wondered if you don't (at least subconsciously) qualify for the "second tongue" group where we entertain all types of linguistic or migratory confusion. cheers from berlin!

Ah well, the subcontinent is too big not to be represented everywhere! Thanks for the read and comment.

Jon, glad you enjoyed "Island of Final Regrets." It was one of those stories that surprise the writer as well as the reader, which is why, I guess, I chose it for my first Fictionaut submission. Keep your eye out for a 'sequel-of-sorts' written a year so later. Thanks for taking the time to comment.

Hi Jon - thanks for your comments on "Three dreamers." I was wondering about the dialogue as well.

Great points on my story. Thank you so much for taking the time to read/critique! :)

Hi, Jon,

Thank you for the note! Just read "Clean" and enjoyed it very much--

yrs,
Reese

the obituaries? it's a nice party trick, but not so intriguing in the day to day. it's depressing in waves. but makes for good material, if that's not too terribly masochistic to admit.

Hi, Jon, thanks for your kind words about Debriefed, Believed. Appreciated, David

Hi Jon,

Post a Tiger in the Life Boat Story!

Cheers,
Matt

Thanks for reading & commenting on "Red," Jon- I really appreciate it.

Thanks for the kind words, Jon. Happy Holidays!

Jon:

Thanks for what you said. I liked "Clean" a lot as well. Let me know how you're doing and what you've been writing.