Descanso
by Jane Hammons
The highway from the railroad crossing to my house is covered with little white crosses for people who die in wrecks. One cross is for the whole Hopson family. They got it the night Mr. Hopson tried to beat the train in a pick-up full of him and his wife and eight kids in the back.
I take rosaries from the crosses but I leave the plastic flowers. My friend Lupe says descanso means resting place in Spanish and I shouldn't steal rosaries because I am a Methodist and what do I want them for anyway.
In kindergarten Rose Hopson always put her nap towel next to mine. Once I whistled, not breezy like a song. Loud. The kind for calling dogs.
The teacher says Who can't be quiet? Who can't follow rules? She asks the same way she says CAT C-A-T DOG D-O-G poking the words on the blackboard with her sharp stick. She takes her wooden paddle out of a drawer that is made just for it. Not telling is the same as lying, she says. She walks around the room tapping the paddle in the palm of her hand.
I lie between Rafael and Rose. Rafael Sanchez has nice pants with cuffs and Rose and me have dresses to our knees. Her legs are skinnier and whiter than mine. Her towel spreads out like a spider web.
The teacher calls Rafael up to the desk. He takes the paddling.
Rose Hopson was a Baptist.
Lupe says stealing is bad whether it's from a Baptist or a Catholic. She won't be friends with a thief. And a liar.
Esther Candeleria's cross has more than a dozen rosaries. I take the one with beads like pomegranate seeds and give it to Rose. I keep the one with blue raindrops for myself.
Wahoo! Looks like I'm the first to read something instead of the last as usual ;)
I really love this narrative voice. So natural and telling. I can imagine this character perfectly on the strength of the voice alone.
As Cynthia says, the voice feels very natural. Nice work.
Whoever this narrator is,thief, liar, falsely or justifiably accused, I can't do anything but pay full attention to her story. Uneasy resting places, rosaries like raindrops and pomegranate seeds, love all of this.
I so love it so. *
Lovely, Jane.
“I keep the one with blue raindrops for myself.”
Such a sad, satisfying, closing line.
From start to finish there is much to love here, Jane. *
Gorgeous writing, love this as well as the other two connected stories. *
You've really captured a child's voice. Lovely imagery, and, I agree with Frank, great ending.
I really admire this story. So many undercurrents and not a word wasted. What you can do with a micro if you're good--very, very good. *
Bing *. I like stories that address religious variety as this one does. Charming, ironic, poetic depiction(s).
There’s a quiet perfection to this piece that I just love.
Love the characters here, Jane, writing about children without sentiment is always good. Love all of it.
This is just wonderful, Jane. Love it *
Very good writing, I enjoy reading, voice, well chosen words: a particular story with wide ranging implications, conceptual weight.
Gorgeous and real and true, Jane. Love it. *
Great piece, Jane, rich far beyond its length.
There were times while reading this I honestly thought I might have been reading a lost story of Barry Hannah's. Envy.
Thank you all for your reads and comments on this story, one that is close to my heart (so close I was a little nervous about posting it, to be honest).
The declarative restraint is very powerful here. Excellent piece, Jane.
Gorgeous writing and flow.
Wonderful images, and yes - the voice. Vivid and dense with character and conflict. Lovely work! *
Super awesome!
This swirls in the head, the images of the crosses, the cemetery, the rosaries, the thefts, the little children laid out on nap towels, the negotiations of children, the religions laid out, as if somehow they are truly different. Wonderful, unsentimental, a terrifically strong voice. *
I really love this. Kids in their own little world, making up their own rules.
Love this one. Love, love, love it.
Wonderful. Love it. *
Splendid mood.
Wonderful narrative voice. LOOOOOVVVVVVE this story. Peace *
There are little flecks in the language that make the character scintillate: the family "got it" when the train hit them; the casually accepted "for families who die in wrecks."
You pinch away the sentimentality at just the right moments, making for a brilliant story.
Thank you all so much for your comments on this little story.
So lovely and tender. Amazing voice. *
This is such a singular voice. I was enchanted.
Sometimes only the matter-of-fact voice of a child can get to the heart of things.
Well done!
Jane, the title made me want to read this. I figured your story would be a twist on the the meaning. I was right there in that room with those kids. So real.
Enjoyed the voice and observations in this. Children express what they feel and see clearly.
Jane its a beautiful story, how did I miss on the first go-round??
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Thanks for finding old Descanso, Susan :) Just noticed your comment!