Walter, thank you so much for your comment & * for "Madness." Madness indeed, esp. so because the main character is alive & kicking, more or less. Not much exaggeration here, I'm afraid.
Hi back to you, Walter. Well, your "Sunglasses" has got me spelunking in Greek tragedy. What can I say - it's true. Your story put me in mind of one speech in particular, as I remember it, Cassandra against the sun. (No sunglasses for that lady, alas.) I can't find the one I'm thinking of. But I'm grateful to you for turning my mind this way, however far (or not) from your intention this may have been. The hunt is a pleasure in itself. Man, those Greeks knew how to hurl a rant. As do you.
Walter, thank you for your most generous words on "Lynched." (If I were a character, I'd go lava cheeks.) And may I say what a wonderful name you have, having never gotten to use it in actual address before, just realizing; it was my father's, too.
Thank you very much for the comment on 'Tasted Like Apples,' Walter. 'Gots' was the prompt I struggled with too, so I'm glad its use didn't come across as forced.
The poem is so strong in its details, many of which have a revolutionary potential, I was just expecting a bigger payoff. I think your idea of a different kind of ending can work though. It's the last two lines specifically you might rethink. Less punch than the previous three. IMO.
Hi Walt, and thanks so much for your lovely comments on Summer in the City. Yep, those hot NYC summmers can make for big trouble!
Hope you are staying cool
Hi Walter, thanks for the comment on clowns. I think you're right about the clean underwear. And then there's the whole custard pie thing. Of course the two can't really be separated.
Ah, yes, we have some pretty dangerous things here in Aussie land! Amongst other things you would have heard of course, of drop bears?
Thanks Walter for the fav.
Walter, thanks for your great comments and observations on Things I Should Have Done - #4. I think you're right, not sure that assessments really work, but it sure is fun to start a narrator's premise with "I should have..."
Walt! thanks for your comment on Celebrating Difference. Glad you liked it -- it's different from what I'm writing more of these days, but it's the sort of thing I've written mostly in the past. Still tweaking it and looking for ways to improve it so I can send it off somewhere and grab someone's eye. Appreciate the insights.
Hey there Kindred, thank you for your thoughts on The Heart Jar. I love the Indiana Jones Everyman, only a defeated one, who has a heart maybe he wishes was only for decorative purposes.
Thanks, Walter. It's one of my darker time poems. Don't go there too often.
So many suicides here in Australia, especially teenagers. I'ts so sad, all that lost potential.
hey walter! ha ha, sorry for the andy k act, that was a good line, sir. things are good with me...i'll tell cecil hey for you. he's drunk right now but will be up soon.
Now that I've really been digging into fictionaut over the past few days, reading great stories by so many talented writers, "a night on the f'naut" resonates even more!
Holy carp, Walt (yeah, I don't know to what extent a girl should curse all over another's Home Page, but you know what I mean when I'm writing about fish): you made me blush! Thanks for your comment on Pi in the Sky. I'm in shock, now I'm worried about living up to the hype. Yikes, better get to writing... thanks, Mr B!
Glad you liked Life's Living, Walter. The last reference was to the bush (you call them wild) fires of Ash Wednesday Feb 16th 1983. My kids were very young and I also had a 13 week old baby. We only just managed to get out in time and I remember standing on my front porch seeing the spot fires of the main front and thinking, this is when people ask 'god' for help. I then thought no, if I do that I will have to give god credit for my survival.
Many people died on that day including a woman with her three children who perished in their car about twenty miles from where we lived.
Thanks for reading Nell Shea, Walter. I value your comment highly. I will post other segments next and look forward to your comments, along with reading your work.
Walter -
Thank you for reading. Orbach, there is still no detective like him! This was something I started writing for fun, because although I know it's sick I do sometimes wonder what detectives would think walking into my apartment and trying to figure me out from where I live, and what I own... the books on my bookshelves... the books hidden away! Thanks for the comments, I would ultimately like to have this be a story where the unnamed victim, who will be named, thinks about what will be discovered, while hours later the detectives figure out what they think they know about her.
Cherise
Not sure if you saw my reply comment. I guess I am supposed to be responding on people's walls!? Thanks again.
It's been a crazy week with moving - albeit just across the paddock to the 'new' house.
This weekend we have ANZAC (Australia New Zealand Army Corps)commemorations to remember the fallen soldiers and, because I am a member of the Creswick Light Horse Troop,to also remember the fallen horses from the last ever, cavalry charge to capture the wells of Beersheba. Yes, we ride horses in full uniform and original gear even down to the Sabres and 303's!
Thanks for your comment (and, of course, for the star :) on Easter Oneday. The "almosts" observation is interesting to me in rethinking the piece. Not conscious of it, but certainly true. And the Babcia "quirkiness" . . . if you only knew . . .
re: Mars
Thank you for the comment and the star.
I must go against my policy
of commenting on, or reacting to, reactions to a story I wrote to say that these two characters are complete fabrications, that no detail or generality here applies to my actual life, but, more importantly, that in their inability to locate a problem lies their problem, and while the auhor has control of the weather and the costumes and has the vocabulary to address these things, the characters mostly don't. To some degree they understand this. Denise makes fun of Charlie for using the phrase "our own marriage" because neither has been married to anyone else before, ("...as opposed to yours with bloofus-doofus?") and this was intended to be funny. The husband and wife were rendered as inarticulate and at some distance from having the skills to express their own unhappiness or nostalgia and I hope that is not so dismally the case with me in my real life.The work was dedicated to Rachel Whiteread, sort of po
Those lines you quoted from 'cake tin rusted' are my favourite ones too(note Australian spelling!)Thanks so much.
Intriguing, Walter, in your 'about you' - "grade of life on pass-fail basis? Incomplete"
Who do you suppose will be judging you at the end?
The Universe(ity)of Life. Or maybe yourself? I don't pick you as a God botherer.
Thank you for the lovely comments on GROUNDED. I do talk to the animals, almost daily. At times I think they are the only ones who really listen. Isn't it amazing the altered perspectives we can glean from nature?
Lots of readers/writers hate second person, I know it can be confusing. I'm really pleased you liked The Right Words, though. Thank you Walter for your insightful comments.
Likewise, old son.
Hey, thanks for the read and star and comment, much appreciated! Hope your book arrives here soon!
Congratulations, Walter, on Elsie's World getting published! I can't wait to read the entire collection!
Thanks, Walter. Great comment on "George." Thanks for reading!
Walter, thank you so much for your comment & * for "Madness." Madness indeed, esp. so because the main character is alive & kicking, more or less. Not much exaggeration here, I'm afraid.
Walter, thanks for the fave and the comment on "Foreplay." Isn't revenge a wonderful fantasy? I'm sure even Ghandi had a list.
Hi back to you, Walter. Well, your "Sunglasses" has got me spelunking in Greek tragedy. What can I say - it's true. Your story put me in mind of one speech in particular, as I remember it, Cassandra against the sun. (No sunglasses for that lady, alas.) I can't find the one I'm thinking of. But I'm grateful to you for turning my mind this way, however far (or not) from your intention this may have been. The hunt is a pleasure in itself. Man, those Greeks knew how to hurl a rant. As do you.
Walter! Taos is magic, go there if you can! And thanks.
Thanks for your comment on Headstone, especially the form, something I am totally insecure with in regards to poetry. Or poetry-like things.
Walter, thank you for your most generous words on "Lynched." (If I were a character, I'd go lava cheeks.) And may I say what a wonderful name you have, having never gotten to use it in actual address before, just realizing; it was my father's, too.
Thank you very much for the comment on 'Tasted Like Apples,' Walter. 'Gots' was the prompt I struggled with too, so I'm glad its use didn't come across as forced.
The poem is so strong in its details, many of which have a revolutionary potential, I was just expecting a bigger payoff. I think your idea of a different kind of ending can work though. It's the last two lines specifically you might rethink. Less punch than the previous three. IMO.
Hi Walter! A heartfelt thanks for your generous comments on "Origin" - You made my day!
A very late thank you for your comments on my Bill Franklin story, but heartfelt none-the-less.
Hey Walter, happy weekend! Thanks for your graphic comments on Good Home Wanted. Toe gushy. Mmm, squelchy.
Thank you for reading and commenting on Body Double. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Hi Walter - Thanks so much for your comments on "Goodnight Dogs" :)!
Hi Walt, and thanks so much for your lovely comments on Summer in the City. Yep, those hot NYC summmers can make for big trouble!
Hope you are staying cool
Walter, I am so pleased you enjoyed Lake Chelan, and for your kind words. Nice new pic by the way!
Thanks as always for reading and commenting.
Hey Walter,
Congrats on losing 30 pounds! Fabulous and amazing! And you ought to be incredibly proud of yourself!
Hi Walter, thanks for the comment on clowns. I think you're right about the clean underwear. And then there's the whole custard pie thing. Of course the two can't really be separated.
Hi Walter - Many thanks for reading & commenting on "I don't have a gun" - it's much appreciated :)
Thanks for the comment on Rock On, WB. Wiki-mad on the jonquils, eh? Glad you liked the story...
gotta love wiki!
Ah, yes, we have some pretty dangerous things here in Aussie land! Amongst other things you would have heard of course, of drop bears?
Thanks Walter for the fav.
Thanks, WB, for your comment on Elephant. Glad you liked it.
thank you for your supportive comments on the wacky Alpaca story.
Ah, yes, me hearty! And the 0favs group has walked the plank too!
Thanks, Walter Bjorkman.
I am happy you invaded NC Writers. Welcome. Happy to have you.
Thanks, WB, for your comment on Routine. I am thinking about that comedy, which I at first thought impossible but you know how I like a challenge...
Walter, What? Another mutt? I'm 3/4 Norwegian, 1/4 Swede. Hence the Swedish spelling of my name.
Kindred! Thank you for reading This Girl in That Shirt. Yes, it is the uncommon things that get us sometimes.
Walter,
Thanks for reading the naked man of barcelona. And sorry for the delayed response...i'm still getting my bearings here.
Walter, thanks for your great comments and observations on Things I Should Have Done - #4. I think you're right, not sure that assessments really work, but it sure is fun to start a narrator's premise with "I should have..."
Hey Walter, glad you liked 'blue'. I snorkled over the Great Barrier Reef and the fish there were the most spectacular electric blue.
thanks for the comment on Latitude Adjustment. Poet am sometimes always not but I.
LOVE that picture of WB as a youth. Thank you.
Thanks, Walter. I have great eggs-pectations for myself as an f'naut member. This egg pun will never get old! ;)
Thank you for your generous reading of my "Color Wheel." I'm new here, and I appreciate your insightful comments.
Where do I look? Do you have a link?
Thanks Walter. I've got a soft spot for Mind Games. I spent many, many hours researching perpetual motion! Friction is the problem.
hah i have a few posts with zero favs...perplexing to say the least
Walter, I joined. I hope we're not giving ourselves the evil eye!
Walter, starting a group called 0 Favs, love that!
Thanks, Walter, for reading and commenting on "Eddie Says"--much appreciated!
Dear Walter, thank you for your kind words on my little stories! I am proud to be called a Brooklynite by you.
Thanks Walter, for your once again insightful comments on Common Unc. Oh, for a world with manners aka respect/care/consideration
Walt! thanks for your comment on Celebrating Difference. Glad you liked it -- it's different from what I'm writing more of these days, but it's the sort of thing I've written mostly in the past. Still tweaking it and looking for ways to improve it so I can send it off somewhere and grab someone's eye. Appreciate the insights.
Walt, thanks so much for reading and commenting on my poem Level, very much appreciated
Thanks for the comment on "Feb 16"! Much appreciated.
Thank you for you comments on Leaves of Yesterday.
(smile)
Hey there Kindred, thank you for your thoughts on The Heart Jar. I love the Indiana Jones Everyman, only a defeated one, who has a heart maybe he wishes was only for decorative purposes.
Thanks, Walter. It's one of my darker time poems. Don't go there too often.
So many suicides here in Australia, especially teenagers. I'ts so sad, all that lost potential.
Thank you, Walter, for reading "Hammer Nail Nail" and your comments, both on content and the length, glad to know!
Thank you, Walter, for reading "Hammer Nail Nail" and your comments, both on content and the length, glad to know!
hey walter! ha ha, sorry for the andy k act, that was a good line, sir. things are good with me...i'll tell cecil hey for you. he's drunk right now but will be up soon.
Now that I've really been digging into fictionaut over the past few days, reading great stories by so many talented writers, "a night on the f'naut" resonates even more!
Of course the poem is symbolic and metaphoric too. But I see your point and have clarified. Thanks, Walter, most helpful.
Holy carp, Walt (yeah, I don't know to what extent a girl should curse all over another's Home Page, but you know what I mean when I'm writing about fish): you made me blush! Thanks for your comment on Pi in the Sky. I'm in shock, now I'm worried about living up to the hype. Yikes, better get to writing... thanks, Mr B!
Glad you liked Life's Living, Walter. The last reference was to the bush (you call them wild) fires of Ash Wednesday Feb 16th 1983. My kids were very young and I also had a 13 week old baby. We only just managed to get out in time and I remember standing on my front porch seeing the spot fires of the main front and thinking, this is when people ask 'god' for help. I then thought no, if I do that I will have to give god credit for my survival.
Many people died on that day including a woman with her three children who perished in their car about twenty miles from where we lived.
Okay, Mister, your poem is up -- On West 4th Street
Thanks for reading Nell Shea, Walter. I value your comment highly. I will post other segments next and look forward to your comments, along with reading your work.
Walter -
Thank you for reading. Orbach, there is still no detective like him! This was something I started writing for fun, because although I know it's sick I do sometimes wonder what detectives would think walking into my apartment and trying to figure me out from where I live, and what I own... the books on my bookshelves... the books hidden away! Thanks for the comments, I would ultimately like to have this be a story where the unnamed victim, who will be named, thinks about what will be discovered, while hours later the detectives figure out what they think they know about her.
Cherise
Not sure if you saw my reply comment. I guess I am supposed to be responding on people's walls!? Thanks again.
It's been a crazy week with moving - albeit just across the paddock to the 'new' house.
This weekend we have ANZAC (Australia New Zealand Army Corps)commemorations to remember the fallen soldiers and, because I am a member of the Creswick Light Horse Troop,to also remember the fallen horses from the last ever, cavalry charge to capture the wells of Beersheba. Yes, we ride horses in full uniform and original gear even down to the Sabres and 303's!
Yes, Walter, I see what you mean. Thanks, I think ;-)
Thanks for reading my work and your generous comments.
Hey Mitch, thanks for reading and commenting on A Boy and His Tire. foster.
Thanks for your comments, Walter!
Thanks for faveing Pleiku Jacket. Always nice to be read by someone who gets it.
Thanks for your comment (and, of course, for the star :) on Easter Oneday. The "almosts" observation is interesting to me in rethinking the piece. Not conscious of it, but certainly true. And the Babcia "quirkiness" . . . if you only knew . . .
Thanks, Walter. Love your comments!
re: Mars
Thank you for the comment and the star.
I must go against my policy
of commenting on, or reacting to, reactions to a story I wrote to say that these two characters are complete fabrications, that no detail or generality here applies to my actual life, but, more importantly, that in their inability to locate a problem lies their problem, and while the auhor has control of the weather and the costumes and has the vocabulary to address these things, the characters mostly don't. To some degree they understand this. Denise makes fun of Charlie for using the phrase "our own marriage" because neither has been married to anyone else before, ("...as opposed to yours with bloofus-doofus?") and this was intended to be funny. The husband and wife were rendered as inarticulate and at some distance from having the skills to express their own unhappiness or nostalgia and I hope that is not so dismally the case with me in my real life.The work was dedicated to Rachel Whiteread, sort of po
You can take credit for everything, dude, in that piece. I know you were doing Wiki, of course, and flipping another entry is simply triple hip.
Walter, message me when the prequel is posted
Thanks for the careful and thoughtful reading of my poem. I am considering how disruptive and off-step is the cloud line.
Hmm.
Walter, I so much appreciate your read and comment on Remember Hardy, yes... those were the days...
Thanks Walter for your comments on "Get Some Strange" - I hadn't thought of the Doors, but it certainly fits the mood of the piece :)
Thank you so much for your comments, Walter!
Those lines you quoted from 'cake tin rusted' are my favourite ones too(note Australian spelling!)Thanks so much.
Intriguing, Walter, in your 'about you' - "grade of life on pass-fail basis? Incomplete"
Who do you suppose will be judging you at the end?
The Universe(ity)of Life. Or maybe yourself? I don't pick you as a God botherer.
ha ha! maybe that was me on your bike. It's possible I got the year wrong :)
Thank you for the lovely comments on GROUNDED. I do talk to the animals, almost daily. At times I think they are the only ones who really listen. Isn't it amazing the altered perspectives we can glean from nature?
Thanks for your comments on Hope in the Shebelle. Glad you liked the story. A novella is a nice idea.
Lots of readers/writers hate second person, I know it can be confusing. I'm really pleased you liked The Right Words, though. Thank you Walter for your insightful comments.
Hey, we're neighbors! Where in Maryland? Thank YOU for commenting on my story The Blues are Running - made me giddy, hee-hee! Peace...
Gee, Walter, do you really find them dysfunctional (ha ha). Thanks so much for your comments on St. Barts
Cheers!
Thanks so much for your comments of AGLB :) Also love your greatest accomplishment!
I like Bob Dylan next to William Blake!
Thanks so much for that, Walter.
thanks for the read on 3rd & Long....remember the days the Jets played at Shea, but think i lost interest about the time Lou Holtz had his stint
Great reference to Newman, sir, thanks for reading my Fuckhead story.
Very interesting website. I really enjoyed it and better - it got me to thinking.
thanx for your read and comment!
Ubu Roi. Never saw Jarry on anybody's fav list before. Happy memories. Thank you! Oh, my! And Miss Lonelyhearts, too!
Walter, I very much appreciate your comments on my poem Tangled.
Hi Walter, where in Md are you? I'm near Annapolis. Nice to be in touch.
wishing mr.bjorkman would submit something to metazen.ca ... feeling a kind of love of his words...