Walking to work, Lawrence Settler was struck by a bus as he crossed a one-way street. He was killed instantly. His final thought had been, Nothing's coming. He had looked in the wrong direction.
Had he not been struck by a bus as he crossed a one-way street, he would have reached his office building in about eight minutes. Once there, he would have exited the elevator on the thirty-first floor and walked the short walk to his desk.
At his desk, he would have hung his coat against the wall so that it faced outward, and then placed his hat on the hook provided so that together they resembled an invisible man. He would have paused to admire his handiwork; he sometimes felt invisible.
He would have found his affairs to be in the same disarray they had been left, with nothing new but a short note taped to his phone: See me. It would have been written by his boss. He would have known why.
As he walked to the office of his boss, he would have passed three people. He would have spoken to two, but neither would have spoken back. When he entered the office of his boss, he would have been terminated by an anonymous female from human resources. His termination would have come as no surprise; the anonymous female would have.
Escorted from the building at the arm of an armed guard, he would have walked to the nearest open bar. It would have been nine-thirty in the morning. The time would have been of little concern. After two hours of ale, he would have pleaded, Help me. After three hours of ale, he would have consumed the courage needed to confront Mrs. Settler, but before he reached his apartment, he would have been struck by a bus as he crossed a one-way street. He would have been killed instantly. His final thought would have been, I hope something's coming. He would have failed to look in either direction.
Had he not been struck by a bus, he would have reached his apartment building in about eight minutes. Once there, he would have exited the elevator on the thirteenth floor and walked the short walk to his apartment, where he would have found his wife in bed with an anonymous female. The affair would have come as no surprise; the anonymous female would have.
He would have felt as though he had just been struck by a bus
But that already happened.
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A version of this story was published in This Zine Will Change Your Life.
Foster, I love this. You managed to put a few scenarios into one scenario all with variations of the same ending. Very clever!
Foster, this is brilliant. Definite fave! I love the speculation, the multiple scenarios, the emergence of anonymous females, and how everything is tied together so neatly. Expertly done!
Amazing piece, Foster. Pulled me right through. Great form.
Damn! Well-executed hypothetical, Foster. I'm in the piece the whole time. So glad you posted this.
had i not read this story i would have been seated in front of my computer, reading an anonymous story, wondering if it could possibly have been as good as this one--
Made me laugh! A nice, deep, well-rounded one!
pathos excellently wrought.
ouch.
A clever piece with a cinematic feel to the action. Painful in a good way, and there's a unity to the story that isn't forced. I enjoyed it.
Unusual to see a piece as cerebral and understated as this create the depth of satisfaction this one does, Foster. It has a highly original structure, brilliantly told. Superb work!
Inventive, fresh, sad, & funny. What a combination!
This is simply wonderful, I adore the voice, so straight forward yet vulnerable in the way of someone who feels he is "the invisible man". Great work
This is pitch perfect and haunting.
This is what "Stranger Than Fiction" should have been.
Makes me think of "Sliding Doors." Fun story, yours. The parallel lives that must be happening at this moment...
Smart, smart fun. Everything in a day - and like a voice-over from a good movie.
Rad. The whole story is terrific and the ending is amazing. Awesome job, Foster. I look forward to checking out more of your stories.
Brilliant opening line and insightful last thought!
Good twisted (but signaled) theme throughout - Loved it.
Fav
Awesome writing.
I loved this. You should consider submitting it to Like Birds Lit. ;)
Wow, this is the first piece I'm coming to today, by you, and I find it amazing! I love the wackiness of this, but the understated measured tone too. How you achieve that is damn near perfect. The repetition of such details as the anonymous female... brilliant.
The most unique thing I've read in a while.
FAVE indeed!
(and did you get it published somewhere? it should be out there!)
Oh, and the title, too: so clever.
Great!
Has its cake and eats it too.
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well done, Foster. Incredible form. tight.
I particularly like the way he makes himself feel invisible by creating a sort of 'other' with his hat and coat. In turns poignant and biting.
Loved reading this!
Better late than never, Foster. Splendid work, so clever. *
"He would have felt as though he had just been struck by a bus
But that already happened."
So many levels of regret and unhappiness in this story, and so many lines that leave an impression.
Just... clever. I enjoyed how you reuse the same phrases in such a paradoxical way. Fantastic.
So good. Love the idea that a horrible tragedy could actually be preemptive wish fulfillment from an unknowable future state. ("Help me... I hope something's coming.")
And on top of that, it's a fun read. Well done.
Terrific grotesque details. Incredible stuff! Fav.
i like how it starts off with his death but the story continues without any flashbacks to complete the picture.
Oh, fantastic! Perfect pace, just the right emotional distance, and wow, does it pack a punch. *
Nice story.
ahhh, how satisfying to read a rare gem. i was hoping you didnt have the office bldg WTC 2... that would've annoyed the crap outta me. definite fave. thanks for posting.
Really enjoyed this.
p.s. Fave
Well crafted, Fos. It seems like an Escher painting in the time dimension. Very innovative writing! *
How did I miss this? Really great piece, man. Sometimes I ride the bus here just to try and figure people out like the like guy who seemed to be staring straight at me for an uncomfortable length of time and when I asked him what he was looking at, I realized that one eyes strayed ever so slightly to his right which meant there was a 50/50 chance that he was only looking past me. Weird. *
I loved this little gem. It was like one of those dreams where one always ends up in a cul de sac. Very good writing.
I like the dogged inevitability of the outcome in this.
Extraordinary, resonant work! I keep reading it and keep hearing its sounds and seeing its images. Just beautiful.
Addictively dark.