by Meg Tuite
The nurse checked my vitals and squawked, NORMAL, in a screech too loud for a sterile room that held nobody but me. She scribbled into her chart. I had barfed up the oysters and beer scarfed down at the bar earlier and had proceeded to faint again in the ER waiting room.
I should have squatted at home with the TV or People Magazine. Instead, I dragged myself out to drown in another online genius of a date, who mumbled, “There was no life before Kant.” Another word similar to Kant came to mind. This dumb ass hated humans, TV, animals, sleep and the entire 21st century.
I doused back three Buds in the time it took him to detest a variety of subjects including the naivety of quantum physics and pregnant women. I woke up from my stupor and ordered this swain, now eyeing my breasts, and myself two shots of Jack Daniels along with a plate of sliders. The least I could do was get a free meal and a good buzz off this screwdriver, who was now twisting home his theories on facebook fanaticism and the sterilization committee needed to halt the propagation of the species.
I brightened up as this wretch's speech declined, sinking into his suspenders, the drunker he got. He was an overeducated, dumb-of-wheat-beat that parted his sparse hair on the side like a five-year-old. He bristled on about his mother and living the life of a recluse when nausea overcame me. While he battered over mathematics, I started to do my own arithmetic. How long had I been dating these online freaks?
By the time I figured out that my knockers were knocking together like two, sodden sailors and I'd been schtooping these guys for over three months I was on my way to the bathroom as bile moved up my throat toward the sky. Oh God, I prayed for the first time since last year. Not again?
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This story was published in the 2011 issue of the Santa Fe Lit Review. Also included in my chapbook, "Disparate Pathos."
I was a philosophy major. You had me with the title.
Good writing, Meg: " He was an overeducated, dumb-of-wheat-beat that parted his sparse hair on the side like a five-year-old. He bristled on about his mother and living the life of a recluse when nausea overcame me. While he battered over mathematics, I started to do my own arithmetic."
Enjoyed. The closing works well. *
Nice use of language here. I especially liked this: "By the time I figured out that my knockers were knocking..."
Thank you so much, Sam!! I always appreciate your commenting and reading!!!
Thank you so much, Nate!!!
oysters, beer and a nit wit, Wow!
Hahhahaha!Thank you, Estelle!!!
"I woke up from my stupor and ordered this swain, now eyeing my breasts, and myself two shots of Jack Daniels along with a plate of sliders. The least I could do was get a free meal and a good buzz off this screwdriver..."
Unmistakably Meg!
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Yes, this ROCKS and is so, YOU!!! I love this piece and enjoy that you are here, in the FN mix, once again. Yippie! Margaritas on the beach, on me!!!
Oh, god, Meg, this slayed me in the chapbook and slayed me here again!!! I think a few of these guys have crossed my path but thank god I am married, and was able to fend them off by crossing my fingers and brandishing them vampire style.
So funny, Meg!
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yes! *
Thank you so much, Bill!!! Hahhaa! What a signature I have!!!
Robert, I am living vicariously through you now! Yes, please, a margarita on the rocks with salt??? And a dive in the ocean! Thanks for reading, oxooxox
Dear Susan, I'm so glad you brandished them vampire style. You're going to have to show me that one in Chgo!!! hahhaa! So glad you liked this one!!
Thank you so much, Larissa!!! I so appreciate your reading and commenting!
I think I married that guy...
Men. We are pigs, aren't we.
I like the idea of puking in self-defense, Meg. I would have aimed for his shoes ; )*
Hahaha. This is awesome. Love the descriptions of the guy, really paints the portrait of a winner.
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Most excellent. *
More signature excellence, Meg. *
i like the booziness of this & am having fun thinking about the magnitude of idiot the guy must be and the incompatibilities between the characters whose match would only be possible thanks to compatibility algorithms.
Sally, You're cracking me up!! I think we all know that guy, unfortunately!!! hahhahaa! Thanks for your comment!
Alex,
NO!! Only some just like there are those special women we love so. I just happen to like to focus on them!!! I am surrounded by amazing men!!! You included! Thanks for reading!!!
Joani, I ADORE you! Yes, she should have aimed for his shoes!! Hhahaaha!! Thanks so much! Always love your comments!
Thank you so much, Matthew! He is a winner, isn't he?
Thank you, dear Jim Valvis!! I so appreciate your comments, always!
Andrew,
I thank you so much for reading and commenting on this one!!! I'm looking forward to more Mirko stories!!! Cheers!
Stephen,
I love how you brought algorithms into this!!! You are the bomb!!! Thank you so much for your amazing comments!! I always LOVE them!
Man, this punches hard and I love it.
Meg, you are just so ferocious. I am seriously loving your writing these days (not that I always haven't...it's just getting better and better!).
I just love the way you write - so precise and so intense
bloody marvelous piece. terse, visceral, honest, bad-ass!
Thank you so much, Katie!!!
Jules, Thank you so damn much!! Huge compliment coming from you!
Thank you, Luisa!!! I really appreciate that!
Thank you so much, James!! I'll take bad-ass any day!!!
I've seen both of these folks in the bar. Spot on character sketching, Meg. Well done.
Sean,
I've been in that bar!! Thanks so much for your comments!!!
Totally blown away by this. How do you even come up with this stuff? it's pure channeling, pure poetry. This is rough, tough in-your-face hardcore. In all the good ways. I really gotta loosen up.*
I loved this.
Wow, Michael!!! Thank you so much. Scary to even think where it comes from! haha! So appreciate your comments!!!
Thank you so much for reading and commenting, Isabell!!!
Intriguing characters, compelling situation, I enjoyed reading.
"Another word similar to Kant came to mind."
Insert this word into the statement made by the "online genius of a date" and I would agree, there was no life before that.
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Hhahaa! Thank you so much, J.!!! I love your comments! Much appreciated!!
"I doused back three Buds in the time it took him to detest a variety of subjects including the naivety of quantum physics and pregnant women." Love that sentence. Love the story.
Thank you so much, John, for reading and commenting!!!
Ha! So much fun with the words here. And the characters! Not sure where you find yours, but I would like access ;^) Peace *
Thank you so much, amazing Linda!!!
Wonderfully done. I know this guy. He's in my current novel in progress, too (regaling a beautifully dressed woman on Buddhism in a tango club instead of asking her to dance). *
Dear Beate,
I'm so glad this character is in a novel in progress by you!! YEAH!! He needs to be in a tango club! I LOVE that!! Thanks so much for reading and commenting!!
Post modern paladins... I thought they all died out.
star... consider this more entertaining than National Geographic. And I really, really, really like National Geographic.
hahahha! I ALWAYS love your comments, James!!! Thank you so much for reading and making me laugh!!!