Leader of Men
by Meg Tuite
My dad was a tall, good-looking man, though his features bore the slight tremor of the frenzied, similar to that strained purposefulness of a dog that has come to the end of its chain, but does not agree. He was a waving a butcher knife out in front of himself while he spoke, and with each thrust, the knife, a bit of a yes-man itself, nodded up and down in obvious collusion with dad who held it, giving an added force to his words that alone they didn't carry. My mom watched my dad and the knife equally, but said nothing, though her face, exquisite in its own right, said everything.
They stood in front of a wounded tomato that mom had been brutally mutilating before dad had been able to assess the seriousness of the situation and rush in to salvage it from its complete demise. There the tomato sat in front of them, bleeding to death from its right side, a savage testimony to the woman's complete and utter incompetence.
"Wrong," my dad said. "Wrong, wrong, wrong!" He snatched up the knife, calling a halt to this obscene bloodbath. Was it necessary for him to be everywhere at once? Was there nothing that his wife wouldn't destroy if left to her own devices? She understood nothing—absolutely useless. Dad held the knife forcefully and with authority, letting it know immediately that he was in charge now and it was to do exactly as he said. "Look," he said. "Look at the knife. See how I hold it?" It was true. In his hand the knife was pointed and dangerous. It was a weapon, an extension of himself.
My mom's reddened, shriveled hand had reduced the knife to nothing more than a feeble, clumsy thing that fumbled ridiculously with vegetables, pawing them into a slow and painful death. The blade stuttered and hung its head foolishly until it became as dull and lifeless as her tongue.
Dad looked over at mom once more. His eyes rolled together in disgusted formation from one side of his head to the other, a trembling final summation of his entire contempt and without another moment's hesitation, he gripped the knife like nothing less than a leader of men. Using swift, competent strokes he sliced the remaining portion of the tomato that mom had not been able to deface, whereupon the tomato-eighths, also prepared to show her a lesson she would not soon forget, dropped neatly away from each other and lined themselves up efficiently, cleanly and precisely—like well-trained little soldiers in uniform red.
Dad gave mom one more derisive look and swaggered out of the kitchen. Mom stared at the tomato, and then after dad. "This is your head," she said.
Mom slammed the remains of the tomato against the wall and watched them slide artfully, gracefully down to the floor.
Loved this to pieces! As I've said before, you never disappoint. "This is your head," she said." Oh,yeah!
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You described the man's movements so well I almost admired him, or at least felt intimidated into silence. But then I would be as guilty as mom, in her private vision of the artfulness of a smashed tomato. Obviously a complex relationship here.
Thank you so much, MaryAnne!!! I always appreciate your generous comments!! And reading!!
Thank you so much, Mark! Yes, he and the knife have a thing going together!! And the tomato even joins in! Thanks so much for your comments!!!
I love this Meg, very relatable, and the pathos that you delve into here are scary, deep and quite profound in such a compact space (mirroring the one the share!) Bravo! FAVE.
Wow. Jagged and red. *
Ooh how exciting, a glimpse of your novel! And what a taster. Contempt - the King Rat of all the emotions...
Sharp descriptions here (no pun intended), layers of thick tension. Nicely done, Meg.
Fabulous story, Meg. I am completely pulled into this family. The undertones of violence are handled deftly (unlike Mom with the knife), and the lyricism in your sentences is just lovely.
Cannot wait to read your book!!!
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nice. unnervingly cinematic too. and what appear to be mutually exclusive trajectories. explosion to follow no doubt. i look forward to reading the project these people come from.
love the sycophantic knife. *
I love this, Meg. Perfect renditions of character, action. *
Outstanding details, Meg -
"His eyes rolled together in disgusted formation from one side of his head to the other, a trembling final summation of his entire contempt and without another moment's hesitation, he gripped the knife like nothing less than a leader of men."
Wonderful writing. Big like.
LOVE!!! Excellent.
Dear Robert,
Thank so much, as always, for your generous comments!! Pathos, it is!!
Christopher,
I always love your comments: "jagged and red." Nice!!!
Dear Claire,
Thank you so much for reading and commenting, yes, most definitely the King rat of them all!!!
Thank you so much, Neil!!! I so appreciate your reading and commenting!!! Pointed, as always!!
Thank you so much, Susan!!! I so appreciate your comments and am really looking forward to the book coming out! Should be in a week or so!!
Dear Stephen, Your comments are explosive and I always love them!!! "Sychophantic knife" is the all-time winner!! Cracked up! So true!! The yes-man!! Thanks so much for reading and commenting!!
WOW, James!!! Thank you so much for your most generous comments! I really appreciate your reading!!!
Dear Sam,
Thank you so much for reading and commenting!!! I'm so glad you liked it!!
Dear Heather,
I'm so glad you love it!!! I'm very excited for the book to be coming out, finally!!! Thank you so much for reading and commenting!!
Wow, that was satisfying! (I am glad that the tomato was already dead before it hit the wall).Congrats on the publication!
Thank you so much, Carol! That tomato has been through a war!!!
I love the way you told this, the way the scene comes alive. *
Love it! I now have another book to add to my must-reads :)
Also: "Domestic Apparition" -> great title.*
wow, brutal and bold, dark undercurrents - the kitchen as battle ground, the knife, the penis envy, the penis envy projection no less, and the tomato, juicy and soft, a floppy victim to psychological domestic violence... and that first sentence! a great story on its own but with a much larger shadow.
If this excerpt is any indication, your novel will be amazing.
"Dad gave mom one more derisive look and swaggered out of the kitchen. Mom stared at the tomato, and then after dad. 'This is your head,' she said."
Wow, Meg. This is great.
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You have illuminated a world in such a small space. And your sentences are amazing.
Dear Foster,
Thank you so much for reading and commenting!!! Good to see you on FB again!!!
Jen Knox,
Love you and thank you so much and by the way, big congratulations on your huge success!!!!
Marcus,
So love that you brought the penis envy out and into the open where it should be!!!! Always look forward to comments by Marcus Speh!!! You're the best!!!
Dear Bill,
Can't thank you enough for your comments and for reading. Am still excited by your piece that's up: Nietzsche come back to life!!! Thank you for that!!!!
Kathy,
Thank you so much for reading and commenting! I so appreciate it!!!!
This is glorious, Meg! Wow, some awesome sentences in this. Especially the end...kudos on your novel...can't wait to read.
Dear Jules,
Thank you so much!!! I so appreciate your reading and commenting and thank you for the support on the book!!
Oh my! I love this unreasonably!
I regret that I have but one * to give to this.
Thank you so, so much, Jim!! Huge compliment and I so appreciate your taking the time to read and comment!!!!
Love the subtlety and even-handedness of this. No surprise that it is shooting to the top of the charts.
Thank you so much, Jack, for your generous comments and for taking the time to read this one!!!
So much wonderful detail here. Love the way the tomato cleaves into red soldiers, only to slide artfully, gracefully down the wall in bloddy demise. Very much looking forward to reading the whole. peace *
Dear Linda,
Bloody demise! Yes!!! Thank you so much for your poetic comments and I always appreciate your reading and commenting!!!!
That opening line is amazing *
Thank you so much, Jane, for reading, commenting and faving!!!
oh my--a new version of Father Knows Best? I like this exceedinly.
Powerful!
Dear Beate,
I love your comment!!!! Definitely "Father Knows Best!! So beautiful!!! Thanks so much for reading and commenting!!!
Dear Gill,
Thank you so much!!!! I really appreciate your reading and commenting!!!!
yes, this is your head - so fitting an ending to a brutal scene. great story
Thank you so much, Estelle, for reading and commenting!!! Much appreciated, always!!!
I too love reading stories about couples and how they interact...and how they survive the interaction. This is potent stuff, Meg. Great job.
Thank you so much, Gay, for reading and commenting!!! Your book is on its way and you should be getting it soon!!! I so appreciate your support!!
Excellent piece! Loved the ending! Great work!