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Oooh, nice. So simple and spot-on.

Beautiful metaphor, a vivid picture.

A sharp-edged micro, Kari.

those glassy marble eyes! How sad to know it is going on.

A perfect moment.

Excellent micro, Kari! Tightly written with some powerful images.

Kari, this is fabulous!

Oh yes. Yes. Wonderful piece, Kari.

This little piece, kind of a prose poem, speak volumes.
And thru a child's eyes.
Even sadder

Thanks all!!

Absolutely a prose poem.

"Somewhere, between fire and ice, under the wind and above the lost desert, darkness spreads."
I predict someone will use this wonderful sentence as an epigraph for a creative work.

this is incredible. It captures the acceptance, the hoplessness, the sadness...

Bill and Rene, thank you so much!

When you get it just right, it doesn't take many words to get it all said. Bullseye, Kari. Fave.

Jack, I’m so glad you think so. Thank you!

This is really heartbreaking, Kari. Nice work!

Thanks Kathy!

Short and good. Oil by a child.

Nicely done. Love the quote, too.

Martha and Bonnie, thank you both so much!

Very eloquent. Nice writing Kari.

Thank you Mark!

Yeah, just let me add that the whole thing for me is so well put together. It makes the point succinctly. Nice job.

Thank you Darryl. I appreciate it!

Wow this one gave me the shivers. Straight to the gut.

Thanks, Claire!

Beautifully said.
I really liked this.

Gloria, thank you so much. I really appreciate it.

Love this from a child's viewpoint and eye, and down on the floor. So succinctly written.

For me, the last sentence was jarring. When I reread it, I left it out and I found it more powerful without it.

Hi Cherise, thank you so much for the feedback. I do see your point! However, I wanted the piece, and that line in particular, to be jarring. The last line is also meant to tie the story sharply back to the title. An admonishment of sorts. I appreciate your comments – thank you for the read!!

Micro at its best, Kari. So tactile and grounded and simply stated on such a large stage. Great.

Short, not sweet. Stellar. Peace...

Linda, Sheldon, thank you both.

I wish I could master this kind of elegant precision. Good work!

Thank you Cynthia, I appreciate it!

Great story. Short and straight to the heart.

Thank you Jane.

WOW.
This is just great.

This is such a shot to the heart. It is so incredibly sad to think of how neglectful we are of all of our children's future. Powerful, powerful, writing, thank you.

Marcelle, Lou - thank you!

So much said in so few words: interesting perspective on a story so large it's difficult to handle.

A whole world in 4 lines and a word! Compelling!

Beate and JMC, thank you both so much!

This one is beautifully dieted down to its essence. Very cool.

Perfectly said - we're all responsible.

Cheryl and Mark, thanks for the read!

Ooh, I love this, Kari. Like others have said, you create a perfect image in this little story --- beautiful and sad. Well done. *

J.B.,thank you!

Fabulous. It has the feel of a good Amy Hempel story(she's one of my favorite short story writers).
I have never been able to pull off this short, short form, but I feel like I learn something each time I read one that works so well. Kudos!

Wow, thanks so much Jen! I love Amy Hempel’s work.

Very powerful, important Micro -- a story with a message. I'm sorry MSNBC didn't see this during the Gulf oil disaster. The second sentence paints a vivid scene: "She sits at home . . ." *

Kari: Allow me to send this one where it belongs. Fave. (Glad I started 15+, or I would have missed this gem).

JP, I thank you!

Beautifully written!*

Thank you, Bobbi!

I'm late to the party here, but ~ Wow ~This is intense. So brief and powerful. Haunting. *

Appreciate it, Michael!