by Jack Swenson
I had a doctor's appointment the day the passenger jet lost its tail and made an unscheduled stop in Queens. Sick to my stomach, I searched the online news websites for details, but nobody had much information.
I went outside and smoked a cigarette. To the west, behind the house, clouds the colors of ashes were bunched like fists. Later it began to rain. The water pounded on the roof, sending the cats flying for the bedroom, where they huddled cheek to jowl beneath the bed.
My appointment was a routine matter. I go in every six months to have my blood checked. After the checkup, I went to lunch with my wife, who works in the clinic. Later one of the doctors joined us. The conversation was office gossip and chitchat. The medical folks, knowing what was what about calories and cholesterol, ate lightly. I wolfed down a ham and cheese sandwich and a piece of pumpkin pie.
Weekdays I go for a walk in the morning with a friend. That day my friend was bitter because the Baptists were up in arms about the Harry Potter movie. My friend said that our religious nuts were as bad as the Muslims.
Wednesday morning I read a story on the CNN Website about the rebels taking over a radio station in the Afghanistan capital and hiring women to read the news.
I checked my e-mail, and there was a message from my cousin in Minneapolis. It was a joke about a veterinarian, a cat, and a Labrador retriever. I wrote back and told him that I wasn't going to fly on airplanes anymore.
My cousin replied that travel by air was safer than driving.
My wife and I get up early in the morning, my wife because she has to go to work. I get up early because that's when I wake up. Thursday I was up at five o'clock. I fed the cats, and then I went into our home office and booted up the computer. There was a story in the news about a plan in the works to destroy the United States. Mullah Omar was quoted as saying that “America will fall to the ground.” The extinction of America will come about if God is willing.
For some reason the story cheered me. I told my wife that I would be very surprised if God were on the side of the Taliban.
Thursday is garbage day in our neighborhood. The sun was still below the foothills to the east of our house when I went outside to get the newspaper. An Asian woman carrying two bulging plastic sacks was raiding the recycling bins, picking out the aluminum soda cans. As I watched, she went from bin to bin up and down the street. Then she got into her car and drove away. As she left, I noticed the logo on the rear of the car. It was a Mercedes.
“Holy Moses,” I said to myself. “Is this a great country, or what?”
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I like the flat writing in this one a lot Jack. You had another piece like this - the title is escaping me, with that same flat tone, and I find it very effective. As, per usual, your narrator's insights are always interesting and funny.
As always, Jack, you hit a homerun with your story. The tone and voice are perfect. Nice way you tied in what were current events.
Good narrative voice, scenes and settings, clearly placing the time frame with a litany of meaningful observations. I especially liked the ending.
Fave!
I just realized I've really missed reading Jack Swenson.
"I checked my e-mail, and there was a message from my cousin in Minneapolis. It was a joke about a veterinarian, a cat, and a Labrador retriever. I wrote back and told him that I wasn't going to fly on airplanes anymore."
Liked this a lot, Jack.
This is good work, Jack.
only you can wrap a political commentary into a story that reads so deceptively easily that i feel as if i'm in the middle of life not story telling. so good, jack.
[i was particularly happy to find this here today because we're leaving for the U.S. in a few days...a great country indeed.]
Concise writing that's always a joy to read - this one is especially good, Jack. "I get up early because that's when I wake up." - a great line among many great lines.
Love it, Jack, just love it. Makes my red, white and blue blood stand up and sing like Springsteen ... metaphorically, of course.
Great, great story about the quirkiness and loveliness that defines America. Seamless storytelling. Only here, indeed. Peace *
The last line makes the whole story, Jack. Nice.
Funny, glib, honest to god real writing
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Fine stuff, Jack, a poke to the heart of the bizarre appeal of this place.
"To the west, behind the house, clouds the colors of ashes were bunched like fists."
Nice!
Love your slightly off-center point of view, Jack. Good story! *
thoroughly enjoyed this Jack. Congrats. on Istanbull.
This feels off-balance, the weight shifts from one foot to the other, and that feels perfect for this piece. Well done. And you earn that last line.
Jack...I love the writing in this piece...the -- and since I have no original description I will take Cherise's-- the flat narration...almost day-to-day details told exquisitely.
Great story. I like I you often weaves cat into them.
Just found this; fun read. Love the continuous juxtapositions of images and themes throughout: the smoke vs the fisty clouds; you vs the diet docs, and on and on until the final Mullah vs garbage day. Perfect.
I find the Lexus SUV is the best for recycling.
Well-played.
"An Asian woman carrying two bulging plastic sacks was raiding the recycling bins,...As she left, I noticed the logo on the rear of the car. It was a Mercedes."
Tight and finely resonant piece with just the right amount of snark.
Sweet fancy Moses, Jack! You continue to astound and inspire me with how you can lay things out so perfectly simple. A master. Not a word wasted here. Great read! *
I get up early because that's when I wake up.
Does what the best fiction always does: transports. I'm right there with this guy watching the Mercedes drive away.
It might just be me, but I feel a layer of sadness under this voice. I think the glibness is a cover-up. How great and perfect is this image: clouds the colors of ashes were bunched like fists. "Later it began to rain. The water pounded on the roof, sending the cats flying..." Fave.
Deceptively artful, works especially well with narrator's voice.
Yes, only in America. Love the voice and the Baptists.