Today is my thirty-fifth birthday, and I want to wear my hair curly. I want to look natural, the way my grandmother does in the photograph above my couch. I want to recreate this image exactly.
In the picture, she is holding my six-month-old mother, which presents a problem because I have no child. Not that I really want one. I don't like most of my family, so if I had a child, the odds are good that I wouldn't like it; but my lack of child creates a problem if I want to recreate this image.
We're drunk at noon, thanks to a great little concoction called a mimosa that, though not strong enough to suit a thirty-fifth birthday, is served with brunch at Edward's on King Avenue. Trish and I walked here through snow and traffic, through grit and dirt. It's February in Cleveland.
I will never marry Trish, no matter how legal it gets, because I love her too much for that shit. Trish brought an expensive camera, and I can tell she's eager to use it. I will take her shot.
I look divinely outdated: costume jewelry, no makeup, and soft, natural curls. Our waiter laughs quietly at our request but allows us to use the tearoom for our photography session. He walks fast, our waiter, as I wobble on skinny heels.
The tearoom is horrifically prim. There are little cloth dolls with big ceramic heads lined up along the windows. I grab one at random. It slips, head-heavy as it is, into the cradle of my arms.
“I'm ready,” I say.
“Sit in the chair and nurse it,” Trish says. We laugh.
I sit up in a wicker chair. I am the proper lady my mother wanted before she gave up and left. Right now, I am crossed legs, chest out; I am wearing a soft white dress—lacy and completely inappropriate to the Midwest, to 2012, to anything about my existence.
“Capture my essence,” I say.
Trish clicks, readjusts her view, and instructs me to shift. I look down at the doll I chose: its scary, wide-smiled ceramic face. The irony of life is sometimes kind, and I savor the comedy. Trish clicks, moving around me, capturing the moment. I smile down at the scary little prospect, thinking, maybe things do change.
"I will never marry Trish, no matter how legal it gets because I love her too much for that shit."
"The tearoom is horrifically prim."
"The irony of life is sometimes kind, and I savor the comedy."
Oh there are some gems in this story Jen. Truly enjoyed.
Fave.
Great snapshot here! I love this: "The irony of life is sometimes kind..."
A well-written piece, Jen. Enjoyed this. "'Capture my essence,' I say." Yes. Great form.
I love this. So many beautiful lines, so much beneath the words.
A lot going on here, and it captures perfectly the onset of a birthday reflection on life.
Very well-told story, Jen.
We laugh through clenched teeth sometimes, and this felt like one of those moments to me. Loved reading this.
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Great story. Love the image of the "scary, wide-smiled ceramic face." Imaginative and deftly crafted. V. good work. *
wOw is all...favorite
Chilling in a way, and yet gorgeous, too. I think it was the doll being nursed that chilled me. Very good story!
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Stunning, photographic, revelatory in half the space it would take most people to say the same.
Stellar.
Thank you all! I am so happy ... though I was kind of chilled by the image as well, Susan.
This piece began as a prosetry entry for Moon Milk Review, but I never got it together before the deadline. Here's the image that sparked the thing: http://www.moonmilkreview.com/2010/winter-2011-prosetry-contest-woman-with-clown-doll/
Anyway, thanks!!
great voice here. enjoyed the dense texture of this piece.
Lush, layered, effective, fantastic! ****
Great piece, Jen. *
Thank you all, Mark, Marcus, Robert. I really appreciate the read. :)
This evoked one of the FUNNIEST scenes in TV history. The patriarch of the Arrested Development clan is trapped in the attic and befriends these dolls, even having tea with them and hearing them speak. The horrifyingly blank/"smiley" looks on their faces when he chides them for speaking too loudly is classic.
Don't mean to denigrate this piece. It's great and layered and well written. But it evoked one of my favorite show's best scenes so had to mention it.
This is so well done, Jen. You force the mood on the reader in such a good way. The atmosphere is thick, the story grabs the reader, and pulls them close. Excellent writing.
Thank you, Foster!
Franklin, LOVE that show, but I missed that episode. I must watch it now.
This is very good. "I grab one at random and it slips, head-heavy as it is, into the cradle of my arms. 'I'm ready,' I say.
Wow, what a voice here, Jen. The structure for this is perfect, the fast short revelatory shots. This is really good. *
Thank you so much, Rebecca and Kathy. ;)
Nice piece, Jen. Delicate and forceful at the same time.
Good story, Jen. I especially liked the last paragraph.
loving Trish too much, then holding onto that doll. Wow
a very good piece
Andrew, Estelle, Julia, Thanks for reading, and for such lovely comments.
Wow. This was like a steady, low hum of high voltage. This narrative voice, incredible. *
Terrifically suspenseful even though it's made of homespun stuff. Some great lines I'd circle with a PC pen if I had one. Roberto's list is like it. *
This is so penetrating, so exquisite! I love it!
those strange genetic urges inside us we try to make sense of in "rational" ways....
I'm very into the coolness of this. There's just enough punk rock for my tastes. A disconnect, a purposeful disconnect that makes it all work so great. A narrator who bets she would hate her own kid is worthy of a 3000 page novel. More please.
Thanks, Bud. From something so short to so long... yeah, I think that'd be awesome... we'll see. Tantra, Kathy, Ann, M, Thank you!!!
Wow. I really love the symmetry in this piece and the juxtaposition. The image at the beginning where you identify with your grandmother and the final image of you and the irony of you wanting to look natural, but yet have to curl you hair in order to achieve this, and the contrived attire complete with doll. A very powerful write with a rich subtext. *
"Capture my essence." Good stuff!
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"Drunk at noon" "February in Cleveland" Ouch! Compelling storytelling and journey through the inner landscape of the narrator with revealing glimpses of her life. Well done on all of that! *