Ping Pong

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(good fun...what the HELL am I doing awake....)

"a green table of yes" - love this, cherise. this piece is so awfully good.

For whatever reason, this piece made rhythms of Albert Golbarth dance in my head. Nice piece - "Ceiling or wall bank shots may be included in the ultimate scoring tally, but such shots must be called before the shot is slung, or else the shot, even if made, is forfeit.

Masters of their own worlds: together, they rule their conjoined universe."

Good form, Cherise. I like it.

In the differential, they love madly, fuck like the rare lovers they are,..enjoyed the yin yang of images to complete the picture.

Green fields & green light for lovers...
You never lose by loving

Oh, love this! It's clever and lovely at the same time, Cherise. Beautiful writing.

a green table of yes --

love how you close this out, cherise.

I also am a 'green table of yes' fan.

Very good, Cherise. Smart writing, intellegent. *

Thank you all for the great comments and the stars!

Neat! Solid writing, full of excellent turns of phrase.

love the purposeful play of this, Cherise. *

Love this, Cherise! ***!

"green table of yes, forever"
Yes!

a green table of yes... they already said it! Soo good.

Everyone already said it! *

Beautiful! Ping Pong Dang of the Chelan Dynasty, right? *

What a wonderful conception of a relationship that somehow, despite time, just works. Nicely done.

Melissa, Claire, Michael and Susan, thank you all for the terrific comments and stars on this piece!

The green table of yes gets my vote! Wonderful flash, Cherise. *

What an ending! Nice dynamic to this piece, Cherise! Enjoyed!!

Kim and Jules, thank you both for your lovely words!

Love this.

I promised myself that if meridiems was a word I'd give you a faf. Sorry, couldn't find it.

Ah, Alex, you didn't look up the right words! It's ante meridiem - a.m., before mid-day, and post meridiem, p.m., after mid-day. The words exist as I deployed them!

Mark,
Thank you!

You get your fav and I'm gouging out my eyes. They're apparently useless.

Thanks Alex, but, please don't gouge out your eyes!

Sorry I'm late to the party, Cherise. This is a pure delight.

Love the green table of yes. Um, and we just played ping-pong. For real. Peace...

Jack and Linda, many thanks for the lovely words and stars!

I knew you had a great long game - I see now you've got a damn powerful short game as well. This is wonderful. *

Great writing here. Loved it!
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Boudreau - love the great long game and the powerful short game! Thanks for reading and for the fav, missed you.

Gloria, I am honored and flattered! Thank you!

I especially love the very specific rules on shots that still "count." So nice, Cherise, this whole thing, and the green table phrase took my breath. -- * Q

Thank you Quenby! Your lovely comments made my day.

I like the back and forth. Great tempo.

I hope they have rubber on their ping pong paddles.

Simple, sweet, perfect.

Nick, Con, and JP, thank you very much for your reads and comments!

A love story for Our Times; two incomes, adjusting timetables.

But the characters are "always conjoined", so it would seem they make love at every opportunity, rather than fuck. There's a difference.

Solid writing always provides food for thought. *

I love your novel take on this Ramon, thank you for the great comments!

i am also late to the party, have not been around, and this is a beauty. I will read this many times today, love!

Meg, thank you for the great words! So glad you liked this piece.

hi cherise,

another one late to the party but yes to the ping & to the pong--*

Good poem and I enjoyed reading all the back and forths on your wall as well.

I thought I'd seen this a while ago, but notice I didn't comment. Lemme fix that:

Yin yang, ping pong, man, woman, birth, life, death, infinity.

Fave.

(Nod to Sam Jaffe's delightful hair.)

The final sentence caught me up short. I love it so.

Love the last image! This would make a great epithalamium for somebody worthy.

Cherise, a lot of movement in the word choices, and of course the ping pong, a great game, and you do it so well here
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Thanks so much Susan! I haven't been on fictionaut in a while, and I so appreciate the kind words. When I got the invite for the Valentine's Day Massacre, I had to join!

Love this, just found it. A green table of yes. Peace *

Linda,
Sorry for the delay in seeing this... thanks so much for the lovely comments and the star!

yes!!!

This is beautiful. Makes me think of this intercontinental love affair I once had.