Sounds of Silence
by Andrew Stancek
Mirko is humming as they sit in the waiting room. All the words have been said.
“Hold my hand, will you,” she says.
“The doctor is running a little behind,” the nurse says. “A few more minutes.”
“I don't wanna do this, Mirko,” Terka says. “Maybe I should keep it. Maybe this is a sign. The doctor is late so that I keep it after all.”
Mirko squeezes her hand. “Ruin your life, that's what it would do. A kid at sixteen? You gotta be kidding. We've been through this. You don't wanna keep it.”
She snatches her hand back, starts sniffling. “What the hell do you know? Why the fuck are you here, anyway? It's probably not even yours. Could be Duro's, or Fero's, or Tomas's. Shit, at that party.... Could be ten guys. Why the hell don't you just go, leave me alone.”
Mirko takes her hand again; it's trembling and sweaty. “It'll be, OK, Terka. Just breathe. It's the right thing.”
Her sobbing intensifies. “I can't...can't. I'm so scared.”
The nurse comes over with a tissue. Mirko notices a stain on the sleeve of the blue uniform. She's chewing gum; her breath is minty. “I'll take you in now. By yourself. They'll look after you inside.” She's trying to be kind, Mirko thinks. He wants to thank her but Terka is digging her nails into his hand, her face against his shoulder. He pulls her up; the nurse takes an arm, guides her to the door. Terka clutches the door frame before going in, gives him a last pleading look. The door swings behind her.
She comes out without a word, does not speak on the streetcar. She unlocks the gate in front of her house; it clicks behind her. Mirko does not speak either, watches her go in.
She doesn't answer the phone in the next week. As he puts the receiver down Mirko is struck by the silence in the apartment. The parrot, he realizes. No squawking this morning. He walks over to the cage, looks at the bundle of feathers at the bottom. Father will be upset.
This girl's feelings, fears, everything, jump at me, come alive. This isn't writing that lives on the page alone; this is real. *
Send me the links, please! This is a great story, complete in itself. All together, the series is dynamite in my opinion. Hope it's in book form someday. A+ & fav/
Good writing, storytelling, characters, situation, setting, topic.
I do enjoy these Mirko stories, Andrew, though enjoymnet may not be the word ... I'm tempted to say, in the manner of Robert A. Heinlen, that I grok the Mirko stories.
fave, as always for Mirko
Yay! More Mirko, but so sad, so delicious. fave
Smooth writing. Enjoyed.
This is almost frightening in the characterization of the guy. He is so chillingly reasonable. *
i love the characters in this silent but (for the parrot) deadly shard from mirko's life. especially terka, actually, perhaps i've been where mirko was once. his observations of details are marvelous. like beate's comment, too: i recognise this "chillingness" in my good friends from tha region of europe. perhaps it comes with the history?
Mirko is emerging as a complex character. Keep them coming, Andrew.*
Good writing.
I feel her pain, good that she has Mirko.
Well done.*
Andrew, this really got to me.
When she clutched at the doorframe--eegad... and on that ending, I said: Oh my god (aloud). One of your best Mirko's that I've read. Keep 'em coming.
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I love how Beate pinned this guy: "so chillingly reasonable" indeed!*
delighted by this!
Mirko! Yay, love this Andrew. *
Foster,
I am thrilled you find this real.
Jack,
I am blown away by your praise.
J. Mykell,
thanks so much for the praise.
JLD,
from you...so thrilling.
Jill,
I am so glad you enjoyed it.
Beate, such wonderful praise. Thank you.
Marcus,
I bow before you. Always.
MaryAnne,
I appreciate your praise and friendship.
John,
thanks. Many more Mirkos are coming.
Sam,
your praise means much.
Estelle,
I am glad the pain is palpable. Thanks.
Joani,
much appreciated.
Susan,
I am so pleased you liked this one particularly. Many more to come.
Thanks, Jen, always.
Meg,
I am delighted you are delighted.
Kathy,
it means an awful lot from you.
This is excellent.*
Such irony at the end. Beautiful story, Andrew!
Appreciate it, Bobbi and Bonnie.
Intrigued by Mirko!
I think this story posted the week I was on vacation in NYC and I missed it. All the more reason why your interview with Susan is so great! I love this story, Andrew. So complex, and Mirko is a captivating guy, full of complicities. Great work!
A sad Mirko story, full of poignancy. And I get to put up the 20th star ;^) Peace*
Fascinating peek into someone else's world at a particularly sad and trying time...the dialogue - stark, minimal yet incredibly powerful - almost as if the power is in what is left unsaid. Really loved your piece "Waiting on Aida" in the latest issue of Thunderclap magazine! It resonated with me on so many levels and for so many reasons. The shift from voice to voice and perspective to perspective is very powerful!
Wonderful characters, from Mirko to the nurse. Glad your interview invited me here.*
Robert,
you are always so supportive. Thank you.
Linda,
your support means much to me.
Michael,
wonderful to hear you are liking my work, here and elsewhere. I will certainly read yours as well.
Jane,
I am a great admirer of your work. I am thrilled you like this.
yeah, yeah, most compelling characters you have here. excellent work!
Such great talent at boiling down to dramatic essences. Mirko is a terrific invention. *