She found him in the pantry, fly unzipped, tilting over the recycle bin.
“Oh Dad,” she said and led him to the bathroom. She hosed down the urine-soaked container, then returned to the bathroom with a clean pair of boxers. He sobbed into a terry towel. She rubbed small circles between his shoulder blades. Skinny like bird's wings, she thought.
“For Cripe's sake, I built this house,” he said. “You'd think I'd know where I put the goddamn can.”
She waited behind the closed door while he changed. He'd installed the second bathroom twelve years ago, during his one week of vacation. Lined up like ghosts on the front lawn, the second-hand porcelain fixtures had embarrassed her. Her father whistled the whole week, annoying Gershwin tunes between his teeth, happier than a hog in poop because he was banging away on a ‘project'. She could barely hem her surgical scrubs.
A string of obscenities punctuated the burbling water. She opened the door. The face cloth dripped in his shaking hand, spattering his tee shirt.
“What the hell is wrong with me?”
“It's the Parkinson's,” she said. “The neurotransmitters aren't quite connecting in your brain.”
“Harrumph.” He tilted his head at her, then shuffled down the hall. “My head's just fine.”
At dinner time, she found him in the basement. Back to the door, he didn't notice her as he plowed through the toolbox.
“Loose screws, my ass,” he muttered. “Now where's the goddamn Phillips?”
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Inspired by the 52/250 theme: loose connections.
As well as by the man shaking across the room at a recent Quaker meeting. You spend a lot of time sitting there, thinking...
"Lined up like ghosts on the front lawn, the second-hand porcelain fixtures had embarrassed her."
Oh the things that cease to matter.
Lovely and sad, Linda.
Nicely done. Brings the sadness staring right up into the face of reality.
I'll echo Meg. Very sad and lovely. Disease is such a bastard.
Meg, thanks so much for the read and fav -- much appreciated!
After spending nearly two years helping my mother tend my dying father, yes -- the things that cease to matter. Peace...
Thanks you DP! I love when you read my words! Peace...
Stephanie, thank you for reading my story -- disease SUCKS! Peace...
Skillfully written; dynamite story. Don't think you need the last line.
Fav.
Jack, thank you for the read and the star! By last line, do you mean the whole last line, or just 'now where's the gd philips?' Cuz I was contemplating that as well when I wrote. Peace...
Linda,
You create this entirely familiar scene, and take us on such an amazing ride here. And the emotional toll looms, the sadness, like life, ever-present, especially in the face of illness. Loved this, a fave.
Thank you for writing this, Linda. I say that because I've been singing the Neurotransmitter Blues for 30 years. You approached the subject with a certain sensitivity -- it must have been difficult for you. *
Robert, thank you for your amazingly generous comments and the fave -- very happy it resonated with you! Peace...
Ramon, thank you so much for reading and faving this story. I'm honored my words spoke to you, that maybe I provided another set of lyrics to your Blues. Peace...
You handled this theme really well, this story touched me deeply
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Linda, I love the light humour at the end - ah, but such a poignant piece.
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touching, heartbreaking and so very personal. you have the voice here so real.
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Amazing portrait. Touching and lovely. It's also a great take on the theme. *
Susan, Myra, MJ, Matt, and Kim -- THANK YOU all for reading this little story of mine. So happy it touched you. I am always fascinated by what stories strike chords, and which do not -- not always as I expect. Thanks, and peace...
This touched me too. "...annoying Gershwin tunes between his teeth..." So evocative with so few words.
Very powerful story, Linda. Quite moving. Deserves a better title.
Need to capitalize Phillips. (double L also.)
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Beate, thank you for the read and the fav, and so happy you grooved on my favorite line, too! Peace...
Bill, thank you for reading and faving Mr. Fix-It. Makes me happy.
But, my head bows in shame. I am usually consummate in my research. I found my spelling of the screwdriver in Home Depot; I should have figured they wouldn't get it right, and not being a Fix-It gal myself, well... Thank you for the catch, and fixed.
Any suggestions for alternative title much appreciated! Peace...
What a moving piece, Linda. So very human, and well written too.
oh, I love this! Yes! Agree w/ Bill about the title, too close to Carver's Mr. Coffee and Mr. Fixit..
WONDERFUL PIECE.
Kari, thank you for reading -- I so appreciate it! Peace...
Meg, thank you! And ack! I'd forgotten Mr. Coffee and Mr. Fixit. New title, new title... gotta sleep on it. Thank you so much for the WONDERFUL COMMENT! Peace...
Very well done. Thank you for posting this
Another great flash from you.
Great flash, Linda!
Joe, thank you so much for reading -- off to check out your stuff! Peace...
Matt and Marcelle, thank you so much for taking the time to read my stuff -- I appreciate your kind words! Peace...
This really resonates. So many powerful images and lines *
Great story. Love the last bit of dialog. *
Jane, so glad my small story resonated with you. Always an honor to have you read. Thank you! Peace...
Jen, thank you so much for your generous comment and fave! Peace...
Faved this before, but wanted to tell you how much I enjoyed this, Linda. Your work is consistently wonderful.
No matter how many times I read this, the power is not diluted. Fave, of course.
Kathy, THANK YOU! Your comment makes me swoon. Seriously! Peace...
Lou, thank you -- thank you. peace...