17 Days
Sometimes, under the gauze and yellow salves, under the allografts patching your body like so many potato and corn fields planting God's earth, I glimpse you, the real you, my twinned soul from before, the brother who rode me on handle-bars, who beat up the bully on the bus, who read me to sleep when we were kids, the way I read to you now, and that's when I grip your hand, the good one, glad the explosion incinerated the poison inside even if it burned off your smile, because now you are yourself, pure, saved, clean these 17 days.
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Inspired by the 52/250 theme: under wraps.
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Lots in a few words. Heavy.
I like this, it's "gauzy" in a way.
I'm curious about the "17 days" concept though, maybe give a little more about that? :) Sorry, second comment.
this is powerful good, Linda.
Thanks for the read, Larry! yes, heavy indeed. Peace...
Kait, thanks for the read and double comments :^)
Nothing significant about 17 days, though by then most crank is out of your system by then. Peace...
Meg, thanks for kind words and fave on 17 Days -- powerful nice! Peace...
I love the prose poetry feeling of this, the depth and meaning are so inherent in the deft word choices. Tight, and lyrical, made me miss my baby sis! Fave. *
Wow! *
Nice, Linda. What everyone else said. *
I thought this was excellent at 52|250. Still think it's excellent here.
Purified by fire. Tough way to go. But perfectly rendered.
incinerated, awful, but pay back time is great.
Raw power. Whew! Fav.
A marvelous breath, Linda. Good writing.
Roberta, thanks for reading and commenting -- much appreciated! Peace...
Great prose poem.
It is a powerful glimpse. The one in the story and the one you gave us.
Hard to take and hard to take in but one does not hesitate.
Terrific. Short and yet so much there. Yes!
Matt, thank you for the read and generous comment. prose poem? Why not? Me likey. Peace...
Lou, thank you for the very cool comment -- I take this to heart. Peace...
DP, always love when you take a gander at my words -- thank you. I always plunge in. Peace...
Andrew, thank you so kindly for reading and the Yes! Peace!
I rather love this. I just read it three times, and it didn't lose momentum at all. *
Jen, thank you, thank you, thank you :^) Peace...
Linda,
So stirring. I loved it!
so precise and evocative...and I'm a sucker for this particular form, Linda...great*
Great presence in this one.
Dean, Kathy, and Beate -- thank you for your generous reads and comments on 17 Days -- much appreciated! peace...
This gives me comfort. Excellent sentence. Really enjoyed.
lovely
Miraculous. *
Wonderful, as it is at 52/250, Linda! *
So lovely. *
Ann, thank you for your wonderful comment on 17 days -- makes me feel warm all over! Peace...
Catherine, thank you for the pretty star and kind words on 17 days -- so much appreciated! Peace...
Kim, thank you kind woman for the lovely star on 17 days! Peace...
Excellent stuff in so few words. I'd love to be able to write like this.