Upstream
by Claire King
I was born nowhere and couldn't wait to leave. Going with the flow on to bigger and better things.
But home won. Tugged at my core until I found myself moving against the current. Back to nowhere, just like all the rest.
Nothing there had changed.
I found a mate, made babies, prepared to die.
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My first 55 word story and what fun to write.
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I love the last line. Well done.
I love the last line. Well done.
Thanks!
Gah, this is it isn't it? In 55 words this is life. Upstream is a great, great title!
Potent detonation of the quotidian. Really well done.
Great snapshot. I've always thought people were like goldfish, but salmon works, too. Really well...
Nicely done!!
Thanks everyone. Goldfish, Kim? Interesting!
Salmon, goldfish, people who wind up in trailer parks in Georgia. An indie movie starring Gary Busey and Kathie Bates. The possibilities are amazing. Terse, distinct, complete.
Nice compact 55 worder, Claire!
Neat and true.
Oh, Lord, that is one scary story. It could have been me! What is the attraction of the old digs? A death wish?
Thanks James, George and Martha for your kind comments. Now this piece has 'settled' I'm finding it's troubling me more than when I posted it!
Jack, I guess we don't all make our way back to our hometown like the fish do, but in many ways we create it around ourselves. The familiar, the normal? The right place to give birth and to die?
Compact writing. Yes, I too left nowhere and came back. Nothing there had changed but I had.
Perfect. It's cut right to the bone.
Wow, this little piece is turning out to be my post popular posting to date!
Thanks JMC & Susan for your lovely & thoughtful words.
Born nowhere, back to nowhere. A whole life summed up so succinctly and poetically... and yet it is rich in what is left out. *
"I found a mate, made babies, prepared to die."
Great!
Nice work, Claire!
Thanks Cherise, Bill and Christian for your lovely comments. Much appreciated!
Excellent 55 word story. Giving you * number 10.
Oh, Matthew you made my day! It's my first, thank you!
wow.
summed it all up in 55
let's hope there was a lot more life between the lines.
Rene
I liked the underlying philosophy behind the story.Quite well written in few words.
Wow, a lot happening in those 55 words. Fine job.
As a reader, you made me think. And reread; the name of the 55 game. Why do I think, "A life of quiet desperation."?
I love this.
so much in so few words. *
Sad. Poignant. Truthful. Beautiful.