Help Me Own You

Haven't read GG, but I do remember that slang (it's the tits!)

Good obverse/inverse/reverse double-triple-meaning use of the phrase.

I definitely see myself performing this at the Holiday Party. After a few Martini's of course. Thoroughly enjoyed this. "The tits the tits the tits"

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LOVED this, Julie.

Fun and angry.

I like to envision you drunk off your rocker, and a mean drunk at that, and just so pissed off and fed up that you had to write this.
"I wrote a fucking poem about you...."
Love it.

uh oh

Upon reading this, with the unforgettable opening words “I wrote a fucking poem about you/And you’ll like it,” my mind did a back flip and tuned in the sights and sounds of “Knock on Wood” http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1ztZ7WFo3nw. Why is that, dear Jules?

I am intrigued by your angry, raunchy, kick ass phase of writing but, please, occasionally return to writing nostalgic pieces like http://www.fictionaut.com/stories/julia-archer/blue. I hope that, unlike the cruel disappearance of “Blue,” that sweetly sentimental writer still exists…:)

p.s. For the sake of my reputation as a cutting-edge, fun kind of guy, I am giving this a *.

p.p.s. Hey Jules, got so caught up with lovingly tongue-in-cheek comments, I neglected to say that this is an enjoyable, edgy, fun poem! Well done.

i love germaine greer and i love this. made me smile so hard. (can you smile hard? it's the tits, surely the tits.)

Nice piece, Jules. Good form and voice.

I love that you start with a sucker punch of a line!

Love edgy, don't always like angry, but you've put them together in a brilliant--frakkin' brilliant-way. The last line reads like a refrain. Big fave.

p.s.-It's the tits will probably be running through my head all day!

Yikes, this is exceptional work, Ms. Archer. Fave.

Tough and vulnerable and so to the point
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So much back and forth in so few words. Great work.

Evil humors today. The wimins is up in arms. Run for the hills, boys! "longing, Shaken on the rocks with a twist." Great line, great "howl" at the end. *

Loved your voice in this. This was great! Great opening line!

Bingo. ****

bingo bango. *****

bada boom bada bing*******
great stuff!

Loved this.

I love this. It has such bite.

Bang, bite, vulnerability, desperation, a whole frigging fireball of a cocktail. Well done!*

Jules - sorry it took me so long to read this, have been busy and now finally reading and you are blowing my mind. This is fantastic. Fave.

I can't believe I like this.

This chases one down and tackles one and beats one up and the thing is, one likes it.
Lots. It's cool. In fact. One prefers it to Ms. Greer's necessary and rousing but occasionally humorless and/or dated texts.

"I wrote a fucking poem about you/And you'll like it...
What an opening!

The title is right on and the opener hooks. I like to keep abreast of your work, Jules. *

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What a killer opening, and good stuff all. *

Ha! Perfect ending.

"the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings"
Yes.

"takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility"
hmmm...not sure.

So commanding - and wonderful.

Most def a fucking fave :)

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