The Unknown Substance
by Jane Hammons
Mama's good at finding things, but hardly ever what she's looking for. When we had to move out of town, she found us this little trailer so far off the highway we can't even hear the semis at night. We can barely see their lights.
Apaches used to live here. We dig their stuff up. Pottery shards, flint, arrowheads, and bones. Sometimes a whole bowl or grinding stone. When we find something good Mama sells it to her friend Clyde who has a little museum in his gas station at the edge of town. He says the dried-up girl locked in the glass case is a mummy. He took her from a basket at a burial ground.
When she's down in the dirt, what Mama really wants to find is a scrap of boot or a sparkly spur that belonged to Billy the Kid. I tell her that cowboys didn't leave things behind the way Indians did and how would she know if it was his anyway? He's buried over in Ft. Sumner, not that far from here. In the picture postcard she has taped to the fridge, he's slumped over looking dumb. Mama says back in history people didn't turn out the way they really were because of how cameras used to be.
I have a camera, but I have to use all my film taking pictures of nothing in the sky. Late at night when it's almost morning, Mama comes into my room smelling like her favorite perfume. It comes from a bottle that wears a little straw hat. Her breath is always fresh with a mint.
Bright lights in the sky. Get your camera, she says.
If I don't she'll crawl into my bed and tell me about how when she was a little girl a flying saucer crashed over by Corona. She lies and says she was there. We sit on the cold metal steps of our tiny trailer and snap pictures of the morning star all night long. By the time we're done, I have to get ready for school and ride my bike a mile to catch the bus at the gate of H-Bar-Y Ranch. Kids live there, but they go to boarding school. The bus comes just for me.
One day after school I'm riding my bike home, and I see Mama running toward me down the dirt road. She's wrapped up in something shiny and almost clear. She says she found it out by the windmill. I can see Mama's bosoms and her dark hair down there. For the first time I'm glad we live way out here.
It's the unknown substance, she says.
When we get home, she gets out her book on UFOs and reads to me about when the flying saucer crashed and the aliens left their unknown substance behind. It looked like tin foil and snapped back into shape like it was alive. She takes a corner of her substance that looks just like a silky weather balloon I saw in science class and crumples it. She sees what she wants to see. I'd call Clyde, but the phone's turned off, so I eat crackers and go to bed.
For days Mama wears nothing but the unknown substance. She stinks like Clyde's bathroom when she slips into my bed and snuggles with me.
They'll be here soon, she says, her rotten breath warm in my ear.
They're here now, I tell her. You better get ready.
She is smiling at the window like she can see what's coming. I pull the filthy substance up over her head and wrap it tight until she looks like the kind of mummy you see in the movies. She doesn't fight me; she doesn't even care that she can't breathe. When she's done, I wait another day just to make sure she isn't going anywhere. Then I get on my bike and ride.
This is amazing, Jane - the voice, characters, taut scenes - I remember reading this in Twist of Noir. Congrats on the award - it is well-deserved!!!
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"Mama says back in history people didn't turn out the way they really were because of how cameras used to be."
Love the voice in this one. Definitely deserved the Derringer.
I should know better, by now, Jane, but as usual with your stories I didn't see it coming: Whomp, like a brick upside the head, but in a good way, a great way. This deserves every award it has and likely will win,
A wild and woolly story. A great read! *
Excellent piece. Great writing, Jane. Yes to the voice here.
I love the voice. And this story, for so many reasons.
Wow! This piece has it all. Congrats on the award. You deserve it! *
thanks wonderful people! I forgot to say in the author's note that I wrote this in response to a challenge: the story had to be exactly 652 words.
wow, this is amazing. "I have a camera, but I have to use all my film taking pictures of nothing in the sky." floored me and the "mummy" paragraph just had me rolling on the floor with the delight that only this place, this style can bring. so very open and yet to the point. love it how you bring together the extremes of indians, billy the kid and aliens...and always with a lot of heart.
A Tour de Bewildering Stories as well. Nice job. Spooky. Congrats on SMSF.
Jane, this is fantastic. Your writing always flows so beautifully. Each paragraph is its own little story, but each story flows perfectly into the next. I was just recently in Roswell, NM! This is beautiful and resonant in such a short space. *
Puzzling, compelling voice. Splendid writing.
Thanks for your generous comments, Marcus, Larry, Kathy, and Beate.
I believe only someone who lived in Roswell could write such a piece all wrapped around UFO's and substances. Outstanding, Jane. So full of fictional truth and humor and angst.
Wonderful protagonist.
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creepy & good. love your little stark details. that last paragraph is great. & congrats!
Great piece of American Pop with a little bit of crazy thrown in. I feel for that killer - does that make me bad?
Twisted noir is more like it, and in the very best way. Even with the fantastical layers, it was so rich and real, and I was right there. Loved it.
Ah, Jane. I missed this here, but saw it in Twist of Noir. Congratulations.
Jane, delicious words, everything here and yes, creepy good indeed. Love.
I've been buried under mountains of student essays, upon which I have been making comments, so it is, as always, so wonderful to come here and see yours. All of yours. Thanks!
Awesome. Wow. What a great, tragic/cool piece, Jane. Love this. *
Intimate and dark and tragic, with characters you can't help feel sympathy for.
Terrific piece, great voice, amazing ending. *
The writing here is so rich and the atmosphere is mysterious and haunting. There's a reason this won a Derringer!
Very well done. Glad I stopped by!