by Jack Swenson
He brushed past her, sat down on the couch and turned on the television. He sulked. He had wanted to hit the sack early and fool around. Now he'd have to be the Candy Man for thirty or forty kids. They hadn't even eaten dinner.
He could be such a poop, she thought. The doorbell rang again. A pirate, a princess, a something. God knows what the third one was supposed to be. Their father waved at them from the sidewalk. Five minutes later it was a bumble bee. This time Daddy was looking over the kid's shoulder. He pointed. "Ooo, Kit Kats! Get those," he said.
Time passed. They skipped dinner. He had a Diet Coke and munched on potato chips. At ten o'clock they locked the door and turned off the outdoor lights. When he got out of the bathroom, the bedroom was dark, and his wife was already asleep. He turned on the light on the nightstand on his side of the bed, picked up a magazine, and began to flip the pages.
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From ghoulies and ghosties,
Long-leggety beasties,
And things that go bump in the night,
Good Lord, deliver us.
-Anonymous
Great voice, Jack. Direct and clear.
"Time passed. They skipped dinner. He had a Diet Coke and munched on potato chips. At ten o'clock they locked the door and turned off the outdoor lights."
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Really clean writing, not a line to spare - beautifully observed.
Oops - forgot the fave button * (now my cheeks match my hair!)
Spooky! Spooky good! Mwahaha!!
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great slice of life--good thing Halloween is over--now we have Thanksgiving and all the rest--Jan. 2: best day of the year *
The real story's in the bedroom, eh? You're a master at this, Jack.
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Boo yourself, Jack! *
A real Halloween horror story: "the bedroom was dark, and his wife was already asleep."
I like the part where Daddy looks over the kid's shoulder, points, and says: "Ooo, Kit Kats! Get those."
Very good story. You convey so much about character in so few words. I remember this one from one of your books..
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Great story, Jack, from the title on. Horror of a different kind!
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