by Jake Barnes
My dad's dad was a quiet man. He seldom spoke; he never raised his voice. A Swedish farm boy, but not the eldest, he immigrated to the USA when he was in his teens. He bought a team of horses and became an ice man. In the winter he cut the ice from the river; in the summer he covered the ice with sawdust to keep it from melting.
In church he met his bride-to-be, daughter of Norwegian immigrants. They married and she bore him two sons and a daughter.
He had coal black hair the day he died. He claimed to be part French, no doubt the offspring of a Swedish girl and a French soldier, although Ole did not mention this.
For years my grandparents lived in a tiny two bedroom house at the edge of the town where I was born. They had a German Shepherd dog named Keno. I loved my grandma, who was a chubby, jolly woman. My grandfather was remote but never unkind. I always played fetch with Keno when we would go over there for a visit.
I was at their house many times, but I remember two occasions especially. One was the day that WW II began, and the other was the day that the Barnum & Baily circus came to town. I was seven years old when the Japanese bombed Pearl Harbor. I think it was the previous year when I watched the circus parade. The wagons rolled past my grandparents' house on Lincoln Ave. on a lazy, peaceful summer afternoon, and in a cage on the last flatbed in the column was the famous ape Gargantua. The beast sat motionless behind the bars of his cage. He did not look happy.
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A new story about old events. The names of the horses were Diamond and Richter.
cool. and good for Gargantua!
I really love all the details and the way they pop up, especially "A Swedish farm boy, but not the eldest". *
An almost haiku-like focus on perfect images.
Yes. Agree with Gary. Your writing is getting more detailed and focused.*
This is flat out wonderful writing.
Loved this. Made me want to say, "tell it again, Grampa!" and I mean that it the most affectionate and respectful way.
The whole process of cutting ice and covering it in sawdust has always fascinated me. Great image.
Your best I have read so far *
Ah. Good. I love the way you roll out your work. It makes a vacuum for a moment. Makes me leave where I thought it was going, makes me leave myself. A tiny meditation.
...couldn't drag me away.
Star writing!
Well-written piece, Jake. I like. *
I love the image of the ice covered in sawdust, and also how you pair the bombing of Pearl Harbor and the angry ape behind bars in the same paragraph--there's a lot of foreshadowing of what was to come.*
Revisiting one's history is such fodder for good writing- this shows. More please.
Very well written. Love the details that are in this work. *
The stillness of grandfathers and apes.
Nicely written. *
Brilliant last sentence. *
What every one else said, Jake. This is crystalline in its precision.
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