"The truth isn't always beauty, but the hunger for it is.'--Nadine Gordimer
Other things do matter just as much of course. Of course they do. Hey I'm still kind of alive inside this poem here. At least I'd like to think
so, so yes another part of me should have known the many proper names
for all these everyday anti-factuals. I've got nothing on you, brothers. As to
the why; well for me there's always been a big toothy bite out
of something strange and wonderful lurking inside the gut ,or maybe looking is
the better word, just outside the frame of this so-called
life like a ship's boarding plank gently clapping up and
down in my brain of brains, I seem to be able to
sense only when I'm not being so silly as to
think I might actually have something original to sing to the world, to all of
you that is. And then I have to choke down all
those deceptively sleeked back sensuously perfected works of the others still also
alive and kicking around poets smoking their careful lives among us and I am sorely smacked up like
a paper jack thrown up against everything that exists, the cartwheeling
laughing bricks, then the awful crying daytime hours of the modern golden age, the easily broken into sky banking
stars, the sticky dripping egg whitened cloudy rivers of yore, the crawling on hands
and knees line of trees, the blurring of those same stately tree houses with the sped-up antic traffic tropes on top of the crazed and crazier upside down rows of familiar
sidewalks, the yellow smeared make-up of worn out car hoods, with their whistling down windows, the troubled young winds of now with
their beery speaking morning breaths, the skating around the pond like Snoopy with his eyes closed in some kind of personal bliss heavily huffing airplanes, the muffling of butterflies growing en
mass, the rolling down a hill without any brakes grinding to the floorboards doorways, the
falling out of windows windows, the newly ashen smells, oh well,
just about anything you see will do the new trick or treat for sweet snacks, just buffeted back
and forth like a spongy sort of fleshy pinball, until
I think I'm going to surely faint, or maybe stop the latest madness
right there in my little ignoramus tracks and fall down
sound asleep like a little baby worm. I don't know which
it is. I mean how do they do it? Speak it
ever so slowly, so carefully picking out which immaculately groomed
flowers to point out to you next, and then stepping quietly
backwards in their oh so finely-turned out gentlemen's clothes and
letting you go on ahead to admire things from your
own safely chosen childish distance, your own freedom's comfortable as a
big fat overstuffed blue chair perspectives? How? I don't get it. Maybe
I'm tripping way too much on this particular bass riff of emotions, man. But they make it all
sound so terribly easy to get to the painted pretty parts. I want to do
that easy of a dance across the moonscape for you. Yet I struggle from the first word on like
some kind of single-minded kid putting together a toy train track from an
old cardboard box found in a crummy basement somewhere, labelled,
"missing some parts." Just chew on them beaten up paper words for a while, son, and let
them trickle around and around within your slippery tongue's hot cave for
another small while and... And what? Their ready for prime time made words roll out
like already made for radio hit-songs. Like chocolate devil's food
cupcakes on an assembly line, for God's sake. Like little magnetized fuzzy bees humming a mobilized happy
flower hopping singalong inside your campfire's crispy brain. Like. It's no use. None at all, dudes.
Darryl Price 042310
The Sky Here's Full Stopped
under a blanket of
blue snow. That's my
reality. But even if
one of those thread-like
clouds throws its swallowed
light after you I
suppose I'd be happy.
I want your footsteps
illumined on the path.
And if one wild
wind might detach itself
from today's army to
gently brush back the
hair from your cheeks,
well, you know, I
think maybe what's left
of all the free
floating leaves in the
world could not possibly mind.
Darryl Price
A Prisoner Refuses to Eat
They have placed a
gun on every table.
I don't want to
kill you for supper.
They have thrown a
net around every tree.
I don't want a
sky made to order.
They have stolen a
child from every heart.
I do not believe
in this long mirror.
They've become us when
it suits their purpose.
I do not want
to answer that calling.
What I want is
not anything that's made
but looks a lot
like your smiling eyes.
It is in fact
most like your laughing
voice or the yellow
sun blown across daisies.
Darryl Price
yeah we've all been there and then somebody comes along and sez, that's what i wuz thinkin' about this guy darryl, how does he make it sound like lennon never died like a pacheco on the street corner words his siren wolf whistle like . . .
I enjoyed this, Daryl. I can't even tell you why, but this is my favorite: "I got nothing, brother." I suppose I can relate, and that would be an understatement some days.
Thanks so much Walt and Lou. I don't have to tell you how much it means to a writer to hear words back about a piece you've really put your heart into. I'm trying to make art, but I think from my experience here I should just stick with my shorter works.I understand the impact of a small well put together thing of beauty. I've just been kind of experimenting with voices lately, like the old man's in the "faun"poem.But this site can't seem to tolerate too much of that kind of risk-taking on my part. So I'll probably try that next time. All of my chapbooks are filled with only short ones anyway. But,well,I feel like I could give you both a hug.And if that makes me a sentimental fool, so be it.
Great form and rhythm in this work, DP. - "Just chew up them words and let
them trickle around and around with your slippery tongue" Good work here.
Mr. Rasnake says it right on.
In the last stanza, do you mean, "I'm trying way too hard."
Yeah, Matt--I had the word hard in there first but it seemed so cliche that I just picked something different for difference's sake. Sam as always you are a very generous soul. Thank you both.
Another wonderful poem, Darryl. You have such a strong voice and vision. I really admire that about your work.
this inner monologue and then the giving back out at the end with the two poems is an amazing reading experience. It is almost, like being inside the poet's heart. thank you.
When I talk about tripping I'm not talking about doing drugs but falling over my own two feet.
Marcelle and Meg,thank you--you make my heart sing.
Well, I can react to undertakers by saying that it sets up an Ashbery vibe and that's very very hard to do--and embarrassing when it's tried and the work fails. I would bet Ashbery-ness was not your intention here, but that's what I get--a happy mixture of effects from the seemingly random music of phrases and word sounds and new and original sense from off-kilter metaphors with simple sentence, everyday utterance: "I don't get it," or "It's no use."
i like the directness of your language, which helps to keep secondary issues around words, sentence and paragraph structure at bay and allows to be "inside the poet's heart" as meg put it. enjoyed this like i enjoy sitting by flowing water, taking it all in at the same time, holding on to nothing.
it does have an ashbery vibe, which can only be achieved accidentally and not without consequence--
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james' commentary: star
I like these, Matt, and don't have much to add to the things others have said so well about these poems. I like your range. And, well, I'm sure you know this, sometimes texts teach readers how to read them. The first one did that for me--it's like paint built up on canvas, and what James says about the juxtaposition of the short, plain, striking utterance seems right on to me.
"They have stolen a
child from every heart."
Wonderful lines!
Darryl, i really like the first piece here. I realize its a bit different than what you normally put out here and i think it shows another side to your writing thats worth exploring. The words flow beautifully and are a joy to read, they dance before my eyes. I want more!
Antifactuals - love that! Brilliant piece. Have faved.
Jim,Finn,Gary,Stephanie,Beate,Sara and Myra--when you kindly pour that much generous encouragement on me I actually think I start to glow and a million more new ideas for better, more interesting, more creative poems start to spring to mind immediately.I can't ever thank you enough for that.But I'll try with the only way I know how--by making you more poems to read,enjoy and share.Thanks for the inspiration.You rock!
Wow - you’ve described (so beautifully) just what it’s like to try and put world and self into beautiful words, only to feel like the attempt upends itself - first because the world is not so precise as a poem in the making (and yet only a poem can really describe it!) and second because we look around at our bookshelf and suspect that others have already done it, and better. You’ve captured the writer’s, or specifically the poet’s, experience in so many great lines. Three of my favorites: - “I have to swallow those … perfected words of the other alive poets” - “just about anything you see will do, just buffeted back and forth” - the kid putting together the toy train track “found in a crummy basement somewhere labelled ‘missing some parts’” Still, even though the piece speaks to the poet’s experience, it speaks to the world and whoever wants to listen. It speaks not just to the poet’s experience, but (somehow - can’t quite set it down yet) also to human experience. Well done!
THANKS SO MUCH FOR TAKING THE TIME TO GO SO DEEPLY INTO THE EXPERIENCE OF THE POEM, that's really what it's there for,for you to get to feel the various textures of poetic imagination and find out some new sensations that,hopefully,wake us to more of our own strangely familiar reality.Thus,giving us new potential,and a much wider perspective to see things with and yes maybe if we're lucky enough just a bit of joy at knowing yet another piece of the puzzle, the mystery of it all.Much appreciated, my friend.