At the hospital, we know the routine. I haul out my laptop, emailing students, writing papers no one reads. You stare at the same first page of the John Grisham you've carted here for weeks. An hour passes. A nurse finally walks you to the bathroom to pee in a cup. Another hour. The phlebotomist ambles in and pricks your arm. Blood fills the tubes, purple and thick. Three hours. No doctor, no saline drip, no reassurances of ‘soon, soon'. On the way out for coffee, I blast the woman behind reception. I should realize when she says pharmacy hasn't received orders to prep your erlotinib. But I don't. I fume through the hospital lobby, paging the clinical trial coordinator, rescheduling lectures and exams, scowling at my watch.
When I return, the doc stands over you scrunched in the arm chair. He taps an x-ray and shakes his head. You push yourself up, using the armrests for leverage. It takes three tries, but at last you waver on your feet, hand extended. You thank him. The doctor leaves, not recognizing me when he passes, and you collapse. What looks like tears on your cheeks is sweat.
I wheel you down to valet parking. It's late afternoon, the ride home will be hell. You reach back for my hand, squeeze it. A fine cool mist falls from the opaque sky and splatters crystals in your hair. You smile and try to say something, but the car arrives.
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Inspired by the 52/250 theme 'The Last Time'. So often we never know a last time until hindsight. Is that cataloguing and honoring a life -- cross-sections of lasts seen from the luxury of time?
For my dad -- December 4, 2009
So much emotion in this one - anger and frustration and kindness, tenderness and love. Such a lot said in the piece and even the title is good - a hint of the regret felt now we know it's a last time.
Good writing, Linda (and great theme).
"I should realize when she says pharmacy hasn't received orders to prep your erlotinib. But I don't."
So telling... And often, we're so close to the situation, we can't see what's really happening. Powerful, Linda. *
This is well written and powerful, Linda.
Painful to read. Thank God I've got Kaiser! Love the ending. There's nothing much to say, is there?
Moving piece, Linda. Effective writing.
"You smile and try to say something, but the car arrives." The line has a finality to it, Linda. I like this. Nicely done!
terrific title, too.
Thanks all for reading!
Kim, yes, 18 months of wanting some sort of ending, a finality to what seemed endless, but when the end came I didn't see recognize it in time.
Jack, thanks. And yes, thank god for Kaiser and health insurance. But I won't go down the path of the perils of our health care 'system' -- that's for other stories and poems (and God knows I've written a slew of them already).
Peace...
i'm choked up, this is lovely and as sad as life. great, great, great.
D'Arcy, thanks for the kind words and wee star -- much appreciated! And glad you like the title -- last line of a poem of mine...
Meg, I'll savor those last 3 words from your comment all weekend -- thank YOU!
Peace...
Agree with all the above comments.
Just awesome, one of your best, for me.
I am a prisoner of your writing. This is amazing and beautiful, and as always you build your emotion with those god-filled details.
Matt, thanks -- I like agreeable chaps! Peace...
Susan, thank you. Your kind words make me giddy! Peace...
Oh Lou, I am always honored when you read my words. but prisoner? I want my words to FREE you ;^) Thank you. Peace...
This is courageous writing, Linda. An understated mask of acceptance over a tempest of frustration and devastation. And I love the title.
Beate, thank you for the generous comment and fav -- so appreciated! Peace...
"What looks like tears on your cheeks is sweat"
A devastating observation and powerful vignette.
Thanks so much for reading Bill! Peace...
Back reading this again. The title alone is amazing. But so's the rest, too.
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Thanks Michelle! Peace...
wonderful - title, read, setup, character, beginning and last paragraph - POV works extremely well (i've lately taken to the 2nd person myself). so you, when you read this: grab a star.