Delivery
by Kathy Fish
The doorbell rang. It was an older gentleman wearing a tuxedo, a bundle in his arms.
"Here," he said, handing it over.
"It's a baby," Mabel said. Its wee mouth gaped, emitting an odd, churring sound, like a hummingbird.
The man smiled. "A newborn," he said.
She held the bundle out in front of her. The swaddling came loose. The infant burped. "I was expecting a vintage radio. I didn't order this."
"We had to make a substitution."
"I don't even like babies. The whole motherhood thing..." Mabel shuddered.
"And yet..."
The thing was unwieldy. Mabel held it out to the man. It slipped out of its blankets and fell to the floor.
Mabel and the tuxedoed gentleman stared. The infant yowled.
"Are you going to pick it up?" Mabel asked.
"I don't think so." The man clasped his hands behind his back, yawed to the right and to the left like a metronome. The infant screamed. Mrs. Yeardley, Mabel's next door neighbor, stared from the sidewalk. Her annoying little dog, Huntley, yapped.
"Is there a problem?" Mrs. Yeardley called, but got no response.
"Oh for God's sake," Mabel said. She picked up the baby and hoisted it over her shoulder. "This is obviously a mistake."
"I'm very good with babies," Mrs. Yeardley called, a little louder. The man turned and held his hand up to her.
"All's well here," he said. "Just a little adjustment phase. It's quite normal. Go on about your business."
Mabel patted the infant on the bottom, bounced on her knees, swung from side to side. Still, it cried, its damp cheek against her own. The man in the tuxedo was saying something but it was difficult to make out.
"I should get a what? A nine-volt battery? Is that what you said? Come back here!"
The man was already down the steps and unlatching the gate. He turned and smiled. "Well," he said. "Enjoy."
The infant settled lumpily against Mabel's breast. "You smell like oatmeal," Mabel said. She pinched its nose and twisted it. "You are not a vintage radio. Not even close."
It is, indeed, an odd story. It begs many questions. It would feel unfinished, but the ending is just perfect.
Oh, I love, love this. So much better than a vintage radio!
thanks AJ and Marcelle, it was a fun one to write...
Ha! Wicked weird.
thank you John!
Makes all too much sense to me:) I wonder who ordered the baby?
Enjoyed this a lot, Kathy! Thanks.
One of the so very many reasons I loved "Peculiar."
Brilliant. If I could give it five stars, I would. So simple-seeming but successful on so many levels--including just plain old laughs at the sheer nerve and the invention of, like, this business- "The man clasped his hands behind his back, yawed to the right and to the left like a metronome. The infant screamed." Brilliant.
Thanks so much for reading this one, and for the kind words Carol, Dave, and James.
Every word, every image is in just the place it should be. Your story about the duet with a naked neighbor is still my favorite, but this is close.
Thanks, Jack! Oh you're thinking of "Wake Up" that was in Juked...thanks about that one too!
What a wonderful piece this is. I really like the way dialogue carries the story. And a great ending. Outstanding work.
Oh thanks, Sam, so much! When does your new book become available?
Don't know the specific date yet - but it should be this spring.
The "it" references move this one up to the five star level James refers to. Outstanding.
oh man, too kind, Mr. E....I haven't been F'nauting much lately, but Kelly Shriver asked me to post this Bound Off story and I love Bound Off very much...thanks, David
these characters are so wacky yet sumpathetic in some odd way that you've managed to pull off. i felt horrible for the dropped baby but didn't hate the characters who didn't care. i think it was that you just laid out this story without making any "moral judgements", you simply let the plot unfold, and that's what makes it good. funny but i was thinking of you the last few days, i thought i haven't seen a kathy fish story in a while and up one pops!
forgive my typo-- meant sympathetic
Thanks so much, Susan! This is an old one of mine, but it was a lot of fun to write...
Wow. Everything everyone else said and what can I add? Delightful in the darkest way!
Oh i'm so glad you liked it Susan! Thanks!
Great stuff, in so few words. It is odd, but good odd, which makes it fantastic!
Thanks so much, Christian!
Yes. (Maybe this says a lot about where I am in my life): laughed out loud. Just perfect.
Oh I'm glad, Sara. Thanks for reading!
Excellent--with not a word out of whack. From beginning to end a real winner!That's the way to make them stand up and pay attention. Fave!
You're kind, DP, thanks so much!
Fun. I take it as sort of a metaphor too.
thanks much Jon!
wonderful! an ironic parallel to the real-life oddness of parenting:
"All's well here," he said. "Just a little adjustment phase. It's quite normal. Go on about your business."
Thanks, Morgan. I'm still adjusting, ha...
a great story - i really enjoyed reading and listening to this: another dimension, with your voice. i noticed (or thought i did) how important the vintage letter 'Y' is to this story: yapping, yowling, Yeardley...and the big 'yet' at the wonderful end. so well done.
thanks so much, Finnegan!
Laughed all the way through.
Oh I'm glad, R.A.! Thanks for reading.
Oh, yes! The dialogue especially...
aw, thanks, Katrina!
To make a complete little surreal world of its own, in so few words--this was a treat!
Hope it's the first of a series...?
thanks kindly, Barry!
oh...no, it's not part of a series, but a story I wrote a few years ago...I'm glad you liked it!
I wanna be just like you when I grow up! Bravisimo!
oh...no you don't, but thanks much, G. Arthur Brown!
This is odd, but so much fun Kathy. And that's a great last line. I love the surreality.
Thanks Ajay, I'm glad you liked this odd story.
Disconcordant comes to mind. In a good way. I found some words a cacophany 'churring/hummingbird' and 'yawed/metronome.' I had to go back, re-read, make a decision if I liked their juxtaposition (not that my liking matters) but found them successful in eliciting an emotion, a response to the mayhem in the room.
Kathy, this is a gem. The night my wife and I brought our daughter home we kept looking at one another and wondering when the real parents were going to come and get it. Nothing made sense. Lov the husband's line, ..."just a little adjustment.."
thanks for reading, Johnsienoel and Derek!
Great! And I love the man that delivers it...and the neighbor and his words to her...So simple and funny.
I'm glad you liked it, Shelagh, thanks for reading!
Gifted. Hysterical.
Thanks so much, Martha!
'The man clasped his hands behind his back, yawed to the right and to the left like a metronome.'
Amazing line and image, and more equally great & surprising stuff-'Go on about your business', the nine-volt battery, the nose-twisting- throughout. Wonderful, inspiring. Big fav.
Mark, thanks so much for finding this story and commenting on it. I'm so glad you liked it!
Ha! So great. Fantastic, fantastic story. *