by John Riley
We traveled, more like two gals than mother and daughter you said, on a bus that held us captive for days. The world outside was boundless. The one inside was filled with burps and farts and the drunk who pulled the braid you made for me while we sat in the bus stop cafe in Spartanburg. You smoked a Chesterfield, sipped coffee from a thick white cup, and braided my red hair, so much like yours when you were my age.
You talked about lines and circles. Once upon a time wise men said all good things moved in circles. Now the whole world was in love with lines. “But,” you said, “if you don't run fast enough you get pulled into a spin.”
On the bus I sat like an ounce. The drunk sat behind me and counted the stars. His tongue rolled around his lips like an ice cream spoon while he whispered, “507, 508 . . . I'll stop when I get to 1630.”
We rolled north. You smoked and smoked and fell asleep reading Photoplay. I tried to remember all the places we'd been.
Near dark the drunk stopped counting. My seat held me close.
“Don't worry, my sweet” he said. “I won't bother you again. I'm too busy looking for the pattern. I've been out of sync nearly four hundred years.”
His eyes had a filmy glow. “You pulled my braid, you old fool,” I said. “Pulled it straight down, like this.”
“Relax,” he said, “your head'll go cockeyed. Look at what's happened to me. I tried to throw a chart but my orbit slipped. Now I'm running like a witch at dawn.”
“Run all you want,” I said. “We're running too. All I can tell you is if you get to the end turn around. But leave your hands off my new braid. Close your eyes. Take a knock out drop. Just stop wasting my time.”
I looked forward and never looked back. That was the beginning of me and the stars.
By Wheeling it was midnight. Mountain silhouettes held up giant candles. Blue flames, red flames, white flames. I was a fragment in a burning world. You slept on, the bus sped forward. I didn't yet know the world spun round.
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Yesterday was Kepler's birthday. I thought I'd pull this out in celebration. It was first published in Connotation Press.
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An imitable way of making.
This is strange, perfect, and wondrous, John. Happy birthday, Johannes.
Thanks, Gary and Kathy. I truly have never known quite what to think about this one.
You should realize it is a beautiful, energetic, rich piece. perfect end.
My favorite: "Run all you want,” I said. “We're running too. All I can tell you is if you get to the end turn around. But leave your hands off my new braid. Close your eyes. Take a knock out drop. Just stop wasting my time.”
I looked forward and never looked back. That was the beginning of me and the stars."
Well-written piece. Especially like the closing image. I like.
Fabulous last line.*
Great piece and that last line really gives it some spin! "*?
Delightful magic here.
Thanks Mia, Sam, Amanda, Kyle and Carol. Glad you enjoyed this one. Thanks for reading and commenting.
This is a wonderful piece - rich and energetic. ***
This is terrific, John.
"Close your eyes. Take a knock out drop. Just stop wasting my time.” Love that and the world and the bus.*
What I liked most about this was the strange juxtaposition of the real and the surreal, the grittiness of the bus and the glimpse of the stars.*
Thanks you so much Tara, David, Jane and Gary. I'm thrilled you all enjoy this.
Hi John Riley! I remember this. Loved it then, still love it. Write some more goodness, for both of us. ***
I love the writing and the story. *
Thanks, Joani and Paul. I'm trying, Joani, I'm trying.
*, John. What a fine, unusual and well-written story. I liked this:
"I looked forward and never looked back. That was the beginning of me and the stars."
I agree with Gary Hardaway. This is signature John Riley. *
Also I was reminded of Jane Hammons' bus story. Doesn't Bill Yarrow have a bus poem?
Thanks so much, David and Ann. I respect you both so I'm thrilled.
Strong images and propulsive language. Good stuff.
John, this is so lyrically rich, and strong poetic prose. So lush, and magical, I was swept into the story and didn't want it to end (although what a strong last line!) Fave.
Thanks, Oliver and Robert. Thrilled I am.
Wonderful.*
So fine.
Thanks, James and James. Much appreciated.