by Jake Barnes
We have people over for dinner Christmas Day. My wife cooks a crown roast. She brings out her best china. A retired doctor brings his famous hot bean salad.
After dinner we open gifts. I get a book and a flashlight. The book is a novel, which I no longer read. I write short stories; I read short stories. We have a dozen flashlights stashed around the house; we don't really need one more.
Dinner conversation reminds me of the chatter of birds. Happy talk. Nothing real. Oh, well. My wife's efforts in the kitchen are a hit. Everyone sings the praises of the roast.
The next day my wife says no more. Next year she is going to make better use of her time. Go down and help out at a homeless shelter. I give her a high five.
I tell her about the story I read. It was about a family living in their car, driving across town to a shelter where they will join the line, hoping to have a warm place to sleep for the night.
It was good to see our doctor friend. He has bad lungs, among other ailments. He breathes through tubes attached to a small tank of oxygen. He tells us that he is worried because he always gets pneumonia during the winter. He brightens when he recalls that it has been dry and warm this winter in San Francisco where he lives.
Afterwards my wife and I go to bed. I ask her if she wants to cuddle. She says we did that last night. I ask her if she wants to do it again.
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The ghost of Christmas past.
You always know where to end.*
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Oh, hell. We should all snuggle. As often and as much as we can.*
An absurd gentleness permeates the space of this.
*, Love the form. The last part is killer.
*, Jake. I like this a lot. The money line for me:
"Nothing real."
The next day my wife says no more following the scene of small talk at dinner says a lot with a little.
You don't read novels? Fave.
Lovely to close with the real thing.
"Dinner conversation reminds me of the chatter of birds. Happy talk. Nothing real." *
...where all the women are strong and smart, and the men write insightfully about them. *
Many thanks to all of you! I'm glad you like the story. I'll message you all in a day or two.
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I love the blunt and minimal flow from sentence to sentence. This feels hollow, in a good way, as Xmas often does.
The last lines are wonderful. Shawn's note helps me verbalize my response to the story too.
Great ending. Great couple. She knows what she wants. He knows what he wants. I hope they get it. *