Undone
by David James
Last summer our marriage took a direct hit and crashed into a deep pit with little warning when Millicent met a Facebook man and simply left, taking up with him, presenting him with my space in her life to receive her touch and this thought perpetually gnaws away, making me a stranger to myself and I tear up, remembering and focusing on minor, silly things like her joking about having to raise bamboo to feed the stuffed panda I gave her 22 years ago for Valentine's Day that she still slept with when I was out of town.
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Author's Note
It's an attempt at a sorta single sentence Saturday story.
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"... a stranger to myself...." These one sentence pieces are terrific.
I'm enjoying these pieces, David. *
Nicely done.
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Yep. Love how you weaved the panda into this.*
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This one's especially poignant for me. It awakened pains I thought I'd erased. *
It is marvelous as it is though you mention that it is an attempt. Perhaps it is more fait accompli. The bamboo detail, nice. *
Thanks for reading this stuff, folks. Even if they suck, at least, they are over with quickly
Never let your wife sleep with a panda and other parables. *
A good piece, James. The form resting in one, long breath works well.
*interesting exercise
Very poignant and sad, and nice bit about the panda! "*"
Painful. And very good *
*Straight to the heart, David.
beautiful and screwed up. Poignant. Harrowing. But then there is this wonderful image of the man left to grow bamboo, almost as if the act of growing this "thing from nothing" could save him, occupy him, keep him going perpetually as the sentence you wrote this story did. Zen calm, despite the terror of a life unraveling. Well shit, I hope the two facebook cheaters are happy.
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Thanks to all of you for reading my little piece. I appreciate that you also took the time to comment.
well, yeah, who wouldn't be undone! *
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"presenting him with my space in her life..." That's just fantastic!
Fine.
Thanks again...to all of you.
this is your form.
Super, James. And the exasperation comes out in one breath. I'm glad she's gone. B(*&^