No tag and pull, nothing approaching a downward
yank, just a dawning awareness of a heavy current
counter to the attitude of my rod's reaching tip.
A partial reel to check, and as suspected, rising
in a mound, the turtle grass prop-sheared or dissuaded
by the brown algae, given advantage from runoff upriver.
Amidst those grey-green blades, a clown grimace
of grouper. It is an unexpected catch. The biggest fish
I've ever had on, and besides little rocky structure,
I'm fishing from shore. The beachy slope
never draws such goliaths. My trudging revolutions
bring him near faster than reasonable.
Is the thing swimming toward me? Ashore now,
the fish gives way to an upright form. Tall,
lithe, with flashing eyes, he speaks with apology in his
strangely accustomed tenor. We are together
until the turning of the tide, this new love and I.
In the morning, all the tourists are evacuated.
A breach at the plant, for too long under wraps,
has been proven by the loudmouth researchers
to cause mutations among the sealife.
The health effects to humans remain unknown.
Very accomplished.
The darkness IS all around us. Good rhythms and structure, Sara. I like it.
Now THAT is a fish story. *
The dual accomplishment of a complete poetic form and a complete and intriguing story is enviable. I love this piece!
"The beauty slope / never draws such goliaths."
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Agree with Emily, It's the combination of well-executed poem and a surprising and delightful story that makes this a great read.*
Serious fun.
I agree with Sam--beautiful structuring.
Thanks you guys. I hadn't given much thought to this poem for a while and for some reason started playing with it the other night. Structure was the thing I focused on. It's nice to think the story and structure are starting to support each other.
Very fun piece. Super executed. Enjoyed. And will keep my own eyes open for such fine transformations!
Love it. Great piece, Sara!
Ed and Jen, thanks for the read and kind comments!
Love it when a mutation can become a bit of magic. Nice. *
Thank you, Brenda. I wonder how much magic isn't mutation.