Paddle/ Pedal/ Piddle
Tuck Your Head
It took a really tall one to see it. The balls are always coming. It's a benefit the neck is as flexible as a goose debating take-off. Down it goes, chin on chest. Woosh. Balls fly by, just inches above, they graze the premature bald from your head.
Duck at It
They're “at it” all right. They never stop. You say rabbits, I say nah. You say moisture. I say gay puffy cotton clouds. You say boxer briefs, I say pillbox hats, before Dad dated Joan Collins in that dream where Joan duked it out with Mom.
Gut it Out
They would hang upside-down in our garage. Suspended from rafters. He tried to clean all the blood and gore away. But it seeped into the cracks like sewage. On carnival July days it stank. We had to skate outdoors or we'd gag.
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Author's Note
Published at Luciferous, thanks editor Craig Scott (2013/ 14).
"Joan duked it out with Mom"!!
* for the instability in the language.
Strange in all the best ways. Fave.
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@ Andrea: thanks!
@ Amanda: I love how you interpreted this one. Thanks!
@ MIke- you know me better than most. Thanks!
@ Tammy- thanks, I appreciate the support!
I like Mike Moulton's comment here. Robert, this seems propelled by its own internal language and logic, the title and subtitles provide the clues and it's as tight as it can be, with layers of subtext the reader can feel more than know. Really like what you've done here!
I really love how you interpret, and your comments about this experimental piece. Thanks as ever, Kathy!
Oddness at its best. *
Kathy says it best. A delight to read and ponder. *
Incapable of interpretation, but the shifts in sensation held my interest. *
@ John! Thanks so much. That Kathy is such a smart cookie, isn't she!
@ Mathew, I appreciate the comments. This one is quite open to interpret as any one might.
"We had to skate outdoors or we'd gag." So many lines to think about!
Darryl, thanks so much. So nice to see your work and comments here at FN. I've missed you.
Intrigue raised by this piece. *
Thanks, WW! I appreciate it.
Not quite a cut-up, but interesting to try and connect the dots. *
I like how what is said and unsaid leave it for a reader to fill in the blanks. This would have been a great piece for the now defunct Elimae. "*"
@ Daniel: thanks!
@ Kyle: grateful for your comments! I do miss Elimae every day!
love this piece. experimental goodness
* Quirky, funny piece with a bizarrely alliterative title.
@ Bud Smith: thanks for the comments!
@ Michael: I appreciate your comments and the fave.
Always compelling, RGV. ***
Great piece. *
@ James, thanks buddy!
@Nicholas: appreciate it!