She twirls her cell phone end to end. She's waiting for someone to never arrive. Stands there smirking with her border-lined hoodie and her sellout sadsack song and dance. Flip, flip. This is a lady who never got a break. This is a woman scourging the day, the snow, the the. Flip, flip. This is a person, goddamnit, not a woman. It's a person who wishes she was an individual.
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With so much gratitude to the Night Owl Cafe.
Published in RIFT (UnKnown Press, 2015).
I think we all do.*
Nice. Flip. Flip. Click.*
@ Amanda...yes, we all do! Thanks.
@ Emily, I appreciate the repeated phrase! And the fave also.
Such perfect detail, Robert. And wise. *
"This is a woman scourging the day, the snow, the the. Flip, flip."
Good piece, Robert. I like it.
Sam, your feedback means a lot to me. So, thanks!!!
@ John, I appreciate the support. Thanks.
Excellent, sharp micro, Robert Vaughan!
Thanks, Kathy! Really grateful for your comments!
So much said with so few words. Well done.
Appreciate the comments, WW!
...the *the*. Love that, and the snapshot. Nicely done. *
Thanks so much, Mathew!
Wonderful flash fiction!
*, Robert. More of your brevity and wit. So well-done, so universal.
Once again...well done. Another brief look.
@ Mike- thanks so much!
@ David, very kind of you to say such nice things about this piece. Thanks!
@ Andrea- yes, a short short, and I so appreciate your support! xo
This is flash.*
Thanks so much Gary!
"She's waiting for someone to never arrive."
A very good chord.
Super-sharp writing, Robert. I love the energy in this piece, the tone, the attitude *
"This is a woman scourging the day"
Yes. Well done! *
@ Gary H.: thanks for this!
@ Foster: I appreciate your support.
@ Charlotte: thanks for the comments and fave.
Your short fiction pieces are so sharp and piercing. This one is a gem. Fave.
Appreciate the sentiments and fave, Theo.
I love that last line. *
Tara, thanks so much! I appreciate the support.
Nizzzzze!
Thanks so much, Sally!
* This is a vivid sketch and a powerful prose poem. The recurring "flip flip" provides tension that holds the piece together and propels it forward. I've seen this person. I've been this person. Strong work Robert.
Thanks so much, MGM! You rock.
* Scourging the day; mad at the world--I'll be over here smiling at rainbows in puddles from the leaky gas tank.
We're all different, I think I know this character.
Hey Bud, thanks for the comments! Appreciate them and you.
Pithy!
ouch! *
Thanks Jane! ouch indeed.
Strange and wonderful.
This is cool. It reminds me of hearing that the word "woman" is a derogatory and that "lady" is preferred. So "person" here connotes an individual, someone who has made strides to be herself, a someone, a person. And yet personhood is kind of neuter or neutral or something. Accounting for her loneliness. *
Thanks, Ann!
Thanks Darryl!
I love especially the second sentence. It shows so much. *
Thanks so much, Beate!