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Dear Story,
Where are you? I've been looking for nearly five days now. I know you are here somewhere. Perhaps you are under the chair, with the sticky Cheerios and breakfast crumbs. Or maybe you are outside, breathing in fresh morning dew or perching on the laundry line between those two red socks, or squeezing creekmud between your toes as you huddle with the mallards. You could be in the soup I made yesterday, bubbling in the broth with the carrots and peas. Or you could be resting on my downy pillow, nestled in the warm soft white where I lay my head.
I glimpsed you last night in the sideways glance of my lover, I heard you this morning in my child's singsong voice.
You are a space-walker and a time-traveler for, even as you jump across continents and oceans, and though you live very much in the present, you sometimes come to me from an obscured place in the past, and you often feel like the future, full of promise. soupu are in the soup I made yetthere somewhere. Perhaps you are under the chair, with a
I will wait patiently, will not rush you. You'll come at your own pace -- when you are ready, when I am ready. With a whisper or a shout, a tickle or a punch. One way or another, we will find each other.
Ah! This week you are here, camped out
in the spaces between.
"squeezing creekmud between your toes as you huddle with the mallards"
Very fine!
Love this, Michelle.
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This outstanding, Michelle. I'm jealous of your writing this piece - but that's how good writing should make us feel. Wonderful form and pacing. "I will wait patiently, will not rush you. You'll come at your own pace -- when you are ready, when I am ready. With a whisper or a shout, a tickle or a punch. One way or another, we will find each other."
I'm all green.
Ah ha! I’m not the only one who had trouble with the “space camp” prompt. Great take on the prompt. The voice, the pace in this is solid.
Nice perspective: you found a story, a story about yourself, very creatively. Good writing.
Liked this, Michelle, calling the story into being and the use of the spacing at the end is visual poetry, and evocative at the same time: it is there!
This is pure magic. Are you a sorceress? "you sometimes come to me from an obscured place in the past...." Yes, indeed; know the feeling."
Thanks so much. Sorry for the delay in getting back here... I appreciate all your comments -- Bill, Sam, Christian, JM, David, Jack! Those are some awful nice words...
Good take on the challenge. I like the line, "Perhaps you are under the chair, with the sticky Cheerios and breakfast crumbs."
Really like this Michelle. Very creative use of the prompt, but also just a great layered concept of finding a story.
It's just like this! So creative, really good, Michelle.
Great! And so true! I really like what you did here.
Really beautiful, and quietly emotive
Wow, Michelle, in the spaces between, yes!
Crazy time for us at the moment - just bought a house! But I'm glad I took the time to look into fictionaut. Really loved this and so agree with the premise it will come...
BTW enjoying 'Incendiary' it was you who put me onto it wasn't it? Big fav