I first met death in an alley.
A cat frozen stiff and stuck fast to the icy ground on a crackling, frigid February morning. Its blank eye stared up at the Iowa sky.
I stared back.
My little brother careened down the icy slope. His sled flew over the retaining wall at the bottom of the hill and crashed into the street below. A torrent of blood spouted from the gash in his chin, soaking his snowsuit, pooling in a crimson stain in the crystalline snow.
20 winters later, he was dead.
But not from that.
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Hurts the heart artfully.
Very strange for me. Half an our ago, I was still regretting that I'd never owned a Flexible Flyer and wondering how I hadn't died on the sled I did own.
Oh wow yes, yes, yes. That's all I can say. Yes, yes, yes.
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Snow, sleds, and death. Works for me. *
Good writing. Strong compression. Nothing wasted.
Perfect.
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Chilling in a pensive sort of way. *
Whoa...startling images juxtaposed just right.
Compact and compelling. Like.*
Wonderfully plays with expectations.*
Hits hard. So well done. This will stick with me.
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Memories flashed from a distant future. My cuppa... *
Sorry I’m so late getting back to you all on this. Just now getting around to diving in to Editor's Eye. Imagine my surprise to find a piece of mine included! I had NO idea! Steven Gowin, thank you so very much. I am also honored to be included with other writers who are some of my favorite Fictionaut authors and who have written so many pieces that I have admired and enjoyed! This caught me in one of those moods of existential doubt when I question if my writing is like pissing in the wind and it absolutely made my day. Thanks again. All of your comments are much appreciated! Michael
How did I miss this one, Michael! Such deft writing, and huge stakes so under woven, which I love. *