DRIP
Every day you Mama flirts with Constantine in this goddamn market, maybe he you daddy. But you lick you ice cream, little pink tongue like a cat's, flick, flick. Lick fast, girl, the heat's gonna melt it. Like summer's melting me. I ‘member when I ate ice cream with my mama. Ten years? Twenty? Dunno how old I am, but I ‘member how the cold creamy freeze my brain. What? You holding that cone out for me? Spit rushes, my fingers twitch close, and you jump, drop the damn thing, laughing at me scooping the mess off the sidewalk, all greedy.
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Author's Note
Originally published last year in DOG DAYS OF SUMMER, an anthology of summer stories of 100 words edited by our own Michael Solender.
http://issuu.com/tknodcmn/docs/dog_days_of_summer_2010
Inspired by the folks on the street who commune at the Lexington Market, the hucksters and homeless who try to make a go of every day. Peace...
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Cool! [pardon the pun]
Good voice voice - "Spit rushes, my fingers twitch close, and you jump, drop the damn thing..."
Tight piece. Big like.
Thanks Gill for reading my small piece!
Sam, thank you for reading and the pretty star! Peace...
i like this big too. I love the feeling of this voice. This is someone springing forth. It is music. Very good work here.
I fave you, Linda
Why thank you Meg and MaryAnne for your kind words and faves! Peace...
Yes, yes, yes, voice, voice, voice. favfavfav
Good story, voice, scene and setting. I can ‘member when I ate ice cream with my mama, too.
JAmes, thanks thanks THANKS! For reading and faving. Peace...
J. Mykell, thank you for reading and faving -- so glad you like the voice. Peace...
This feels very much Alive with all the senses. A wonderful sense of character and place evoked.
Alison, thank you for reading and faving. Glad all your senses were satisfied! Peace...
I love the voice, you captured the soul of the narator, and the scene, too! *
This writing makes me happy. Good little thing!
The sweetness of her voice melted me along with the melting ice cream. There is a lot of heart in this tiny story.
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Foster, thanks so much for reading, and faving, and so glad you love the voice. Peace...
Kari, so happy to see you here! And so happy this small story makes you happy! Peace...
Susan, thank you so much for your kind words on this drabble of mine. Peace...
Linda,
Wonderfully written--strong voice carries story and character in one full and rich piece. Nice *