To The Woman Who Sat With Her Back To The Door
by kate hill cantrill
Such a curious smell in the air tonight: part skunk, part fire, part rubber of your tire, pulled liquid hot across that road.
I told you once to turn around. I didn’t like the way you sat.
I have very little to say to you. Your brother is an asshole, one. Your ukulele’s heading south, that would be two. And three, three would be the jogger only broke his legs.
I think I told you to turn around. It’s not safe to sit with your back to the door.
I had very little to say to you.
Your shoes he strewn all over the sidewalk. Your books and clothing, too.
Such an asshole, coming to clean you out and taking the subway there to do it. He had no intention of saving you, I mean saving your things, I mean doing with them something with some class.
Why this smell of skunk and fire?
Motorcycle tires have an oily coat until a certain mile; at something like ten you saw that jogger. Well, good for you for breaking his legs. They’ll heal and he will walk again. Oh, four, I gave the amps back to the kid downstairs. He almost lost his dog one night to a hit and run. I’m so sorry, he kept wailing, I’m so sorry, are you hurt? To love anything that much is dumb. He could have been bleeding inside, one organ drowning all the others as the kid slept off his beer and waited until the morning to take the dog to the vet.
I’m so sorry, I’m so sorry. Are you hurt?
Don’t sit like that, goddamn it, it’s just not safe! I could open up the door and knife you in the back, and if I could do it, then think of all who would?
can i just say that i'm happy to have read this? very happy....
Love this, Kate. I adore the photo and the title, too.
Thanks Scott and Kathy!
Oh, this is amazing to read out loud. Wonderful piece.
Thanks, Katrina!
Great voice in this one, an intricate structure, and a powerful rhythm.
What a fantastic cadence. Gripping and vivid.
I agree with Rae up there, very nice cadence. I'm impressed also by how the ambiguity of the relationship between characters becomes the underlying force of the story.
Thanks, Lorissa, Rae, and Dan!
This is wonderfully paced, intense to read. Really enjoyed it.
Love the intermingling of one sentence graphs with longer ones.
There is so much undercurrent here. Great read!