Glory

"We had been doing the dishes together in silence, her freckled hands wrist-deep in suds."

Cami, this line drew me in.

Staccato is doing some great things.

This one has me thinking, Cami. I'm not sure what to make of it, but I know it grabs hold.

I like the image of the grandmother at the sink. I see her forlorn and resigned, the narrator "starry" eyed and full of hope.

Young. Old. Hope. Resignation. That whole sort of thing, I think. That's where this puts me.

Thanks, you guys.

some really lovely images & writing. i particularly appreciate the simple lines, the ones that gouge the reader, right in the gut.

Lovely.

Thanks, Lily and Katrina!

this micro rocks the Casbah. i haven't read one i've liked better for a good while....

Really pretty. I like writing about hair!

Thank you, Rachel and Scott. :)

Love this one, Cami!

Thanks, Arlene!

About 78% sure this is beautifully minimalist.

Thanks, Craig. :)

Love grandmother stories. Beautiful.

Thanks, Gary. :)

gorgeous, cami. there needs to be more flash fiction about grandmothers.

Thanks, Alec. :)

This is good. But the ending is a bit soft. I would say re-reference some part of "the body" at the end.

Thanks!

just re-read this in staccato. i got something accepted there tonight and am thrilled to have my work next to this piece. outstanding work, cami.

Oh, wow, thanks, David! Congrats on your Staccato acceptance-- it's a great place.

Enjoyed reading this, Cami.

Thanks, Sam. :)

Hey friend, congrats on getting this in Best of the Web. Well deserved.