by Ann Bogle
I wanted to earn A's. And an A cup to protect my tall nipples from fondling at school. It was our first year to be graded. Until then, we had been scored on behavior—what if we were to be scored on behavior or graded today? Then we were transitioning from behavior to performance along academic lines, and once, my head still hurting from the kick it received on May 2, the day before my twelfth birthday, from a boy on the playground, probably Hans, but maybe someone else, maybe Jeff, not likely David, and not the twins, Joel and Tim, and not Charles, never could it have been Charles. Charles was the sort of young man in sixth grade who might grow up to defend a woman against the might of other men, so it was not he who kicked my temple, after the teachers had warned the boys not to kick us there. Surely, someone must have wondered what “temple” meant. There was another David, but for the sake of fiction, he goes by Donald in my books. Donald and I had a relationship history that could be traced to the McGovern-Nixon election in which McGovern won only one state, ours, and Nixon won the rest. In the show of hands, Laurie and I had voted for McGovern. The other 28 kids had voted for Nixon. I planned a childhood memoir called Voting for McGovern or Waiting to Be Hippies. I thought of us dressed for those three years in our elephant pants and mini-dresses, beads and chokers at our necks, long blond hair parted down the middle, recorders, easier to play than flute and clarinet, though we played those, too, and as we got to be better at those instruments, recorder became harder to play, easier to overblow, and the girls with soprano voices, one with long brown hair and pretty bangs, joined the Chamber Choir for which they had had to audition, and due to my extreme height—I was 5'2” by seventh grade—I could not or did not think I could sing the high notes the other girls could sing and no boy, no boy could hit those high notes ever again. Charles appeared in the hall in eighth grade sporting the first beard, and I acted maturely toward it, as if it did not faze me that he had grown a beard over the summer and his mother, Gretchen, and his father, Father, had allowed him to do it. If there had been arranged marriage in eighth grade, the grade it used to be and still sometimes is when children left school to work in the fields, I would have hoped that my parents would have arranged for me to marry Mike, who was tall and spread his protective arms around me on the sofa in our living room, despite his age, which must have been only thirteen, already a man like Charles, a man like my father, who must have been 49 at the time, and who got mad at Mike, thinking worse things than arms folded around his daughter, because of bad Donald, Mike who could be described even at thirteen as blue collar because to earn a living is what he wanted to do, and Donald, a poor student who had voted for Nixon in the open election yet picked the only two girls who had voted for McGovern to take him to the equation that led to the baby carriage, could take her dream away from her, to get A's—a bad girl, perhaps, one who wanted to score and score well, an anomaly, a trick in their otherwise orderly progression of nips of vodka to nymphomaniac, not a nympho, maybe a sea nymph or wood nymph, and not an oily-haired girl, a tall girl, at 5'2'', fast at algebra and sure at science and made for weddings after all.
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Author photo circa 197_, the Badlands. Thanks to my sister, Beth, for providing the year for the story "1974" and the photo:
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This is wonderful, Ann. Brimming with good stuff. (elephant pants just a random pick.) Love it. *
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ps The rhythm! the forward flow! (I now grok the Faulknerian sentence - forgive me, I have a headache.) And the winding up is pure gorgeousness.
Love this: "...a bad girl, perhaps, one who wanted to score and score well, an anomaly, a trick to their otherwise orderly progression from nips of vodka to nymphs, not a nymph, but not an oily-haired girl, a tall girl, at 5'2”, fast at algebra and sure at science and made for weddings after all."
I can relate to so much of this, Ann. We must be roughly the same age. I, too, suffered from "extreme height" at that age (then never grew another inch) Perfect details...McGovern-Nixon, the elephant pants...love this. *
Wow. And she never even took a breath! I love this little autobiog. A wild and wacky, wise and funny memoir. Fav.
Catherine and Bill, thanks for your appreciation. Kathy, I'm so glad this resonates with you and with a time. Jack, I was thinking of you after I wrote this, so I'm glad you found and liked it.
A tall girl, tall nipples, so much striving for such a young girl it made me achy.
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Well written, Ann. Great phrasings. Favorite part: "I thought of us dressed for those three years in our elephant pants and mini-dresses, beads and chokers at our necks, long blond hair parted down the middle, recorders, easier to play than flute and clarinet, though we played those, too, and as we got to be better at those instruments, recorder became harder to play, easier to overblow, and the girls with soprano voices, one with long brown hair and pretty bangs, joined the Chamber Choir for which they had had to audition, and due to my extreme height—I was 5'2” by seventh grade—I could not or did not think I could sing the high notes the other girls could sing and no boy, no boy could hit those high notes ever again."
Yes.
Susan, thanks for your comment. Sam, it's nice to know the spot in the story that sings for you.
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Susan and Boudreau typed * without hitting the fav button, so it's a mental seven. Thanks (above) to Susan, and thanks, Boudreau.
A long, strange trip. Beautifully rendered, this.
Thanks, James.
Sharp witted and strong willed, with intellectual attitude. Good writing. I enjoyed reading. I'll give it a * and not forget to hit the button above.
J., thanks for your comment and fav. I appreciate it.
Revisions, slight, 1:20 p.m. Feb. 28, 2011. A few prepositional shifts and rewording (nymphomaniac and nympho and sea nymph and wood nymph).
Ann..you sent me back on this one
we went to different schools together
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Rene, thanks for the cool comment. I enjoy imagining we were unmet friends in different places.
That was cleared up -- thanks, Susan and Boudreau.
Loved this. I raised my hand (and made a poster!) for Nixon that year, because my parents told me they'd be voting for him. And because I thought he was better looking than McGovern (hard to imagine now). Endured the scorn of my two best friends and went home on Election Day to learn that my parents had voted for McGovern after all.
Deb, you're a joy -- that's sad and funny.
This is wonderful and funny, and I love that it's stream-of-consciousness the way childhood memories so often are.
Angela, thanks for this observation.
layers upon layers of ann details *
Great first sentences and wonderful detail throughout. Love the exhausting flow of, a good exhaustion!
Thanks to Lynn Beighley for showing me how to add a photo from FB. Author photo attached, circa 197_, the Badlands.
Thanks, Gary and Shelagh for reading, commenting, and fav'ing the story.
This is really wonderful. It transports me (and I suspect most everyone) back to a time and a place (yours) while also making me remember being 11, 12, 13. And that photograph is the album cover, you know? (p.s. re our creative nonfiction discussions?--this is it!)*
Tour de force. Wow! *
Absolutely loved this, Anne!! It all resonated and sang straight through and I marked a passage that I especially loved, but nothing was stray and no love for any part of this left behind. I faved it! Thanks!!!
I planned a childhood memoir called Voting for McGovern or Waiting to Be Hippies. I thought of us dressed for those three years in our elephant pants and mini-dresses, beads and chokers at our necks, long blond hair parted down the middle, recorders, easier to play than flute and clarinet, though we played those, too, and as we got to be better at those instruments, recorder became harder to play, easier to overblow, and the girls with soprano voices, one with long brown hair and pretty bangs, joined the Chamber Choir for which they had had to audition, and due to my extreme height—I was 5'2” by seventh grade—I could not or did not think I could sing the high notes the other girls could sing and no boy, no boy could hit those high notes ever again." WOW!!! *****
Jane, Bill, and Meg -- I so appreciate your comments and fav's. Thanks!
Lovely.
I like the sentences very much.
And the way the piece seems to float right between memory and fiction, much in the way my memories of that period hover between experience and dreaming.
btw My step father made recorders. You're right how easy it is to fracture the pitches. But it's almost impossible to control the overtones that you produce. So the instrument is useless for multiphonics (and more). For some reason, I have long thought that characteristic summed up the recorder.
But I digress.
Thanks, Stephen. I value your critical awareness and I like the story of the recorders.
Great stream of consciousness, perfectly reflects the time. What particularly striked me is how well you balance that combination of hope/excitement of early adolescence with cynicism.
No favorite line -- the entire piece perfetto. Peace...
Neat comment, Linda, thanks.
A good story to start the weekend.
Thanks, Matthew!
"1974, What I Wanted" has become the most favorited of my new stories -- new since joining Fictionaut in 2009 -- new since 1999 when I completed my first collection of short stories, called Institute of Tut (as yet not published). This is good information for me, as I write in "1974" much the way (how) and about which (what) I hope to write. Good orderly direction.
Ann, you hadn't posted that photo when I first read this. I love it. How graceful you were (and no doubt still are).
Thanks, Kathy. I admit to loving the photo, too, cannot recall it at all, but I remember going to the Badlands in a station wagon. My sister found it in our family archives and put it on FB the day I posted the story or the next -- a coincidence. She's younger so not the photographer. Probably my father took the shot. You can enlarge it by right-clicking on it and selecting view image. Thank you again, Lynn Beighley, for showing me how to insert a photo in a story.
This excitement I feel is FORMAL -- related to FORM. A formal feeling comes -- Emily Dickinson. Forme is power -- Thomas Hobbes. I feel chagrined, if I think of it, that writing is taking me 30 years, but there shines a little stream of sunlight on something that is NEW.
What a start! And such a great finish too. And all the middle as well. Great stuff, Ann... *
Thanks, James Valvis.
"I wanted to earn A's. And an A cup to protect my tall nipples from fondling at school." (this clearly wins the best two-sentence opener ever award) - It brings us in SMACK!
Terrific memoir-ish feeling mixed with caramelized memory. The best most addictive kind of writing and I could eat it all day.
Meg, your comment is priceless. Thanks --
Just brilliant - Ann - Love this *!
Thanks, Marcelle!
i do love this, ann
for reasons cited above
and more
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Thanks, Gary.
What a whirlwind of a tiny story, aptly set in the perfect year of voting for McGovern and waiting to be hippies. I loved that the boys probably wondered what "temple" meant, and the much sweeter "nymph" alternatives.
Thanks for finding this story, Gloria. So glad the era comes across through the children depicted in the story.
"D'l, I reread my email to you (just sent) about literary theories and practices and laughed because it seems written by a sixth grader. My story at F'naut on my profile page called "1974, What I Wanted" is in part about being kicked in the temple by a boy (name withheld even to the narrator) in sixth grade, a true story. After my diagnosis with bipolar at U of Houston at the age of 29, I sent requests for all my medical records. The general practitioner from childhood, retired, sent a partial set of records, including one from the day before I was treated in his office for "migraine." It was a birthday migraine. The migraine was severe and I fully remember it, and B'go knew later that I still sometimes had migraines, following a loss of vision in their aura, but I didn't know and no one reminded me and almost nothing else reminded me, except one verbal cue, that I had been in the doctor's office the day before the migraine after a boy had kicked me in the temple. Boy not named in the record. I imagine that I suffered a memory loss of the event, memory loss neurological. There is a lot more to say about further events and developments, related or not to that kick to the temple, but in that grade, I was the only girl in the pilot project gifted and talented group, called Room 100, where I and five boys learned to use the first computer in the district. It was attached to a coupler and looked like an EEG chart coming out of an IBM Selectric. It was simulated reenactments of Revolutionary and Civil War battles. The boys loved it more than I. I loved the coupler and the IBM Selectric and the colors of the papers stored in Room 100, which was a large supply closet. I think, but do not know for certain, that a boy jealous (angry) that I was in Room 100 and not he, kicked me. It may have been the German-ancestry boy, Hans Alwin, whom I had coronated on the playground as the King of Germany, one of the six boys I "married" after I had read about the wives of Henry VIII and written a school paper about them: Catherine of Aragon, Anne Boleyn, Jane Seymour, Anne of Cleves, Katherine Howard, and Katherine Parr."
Question for further readers: does telling the further background ruin the story as written? Or just require a further writing of it? A variation on a story.
Timeline:
(for eamon byrne who finds my tenses to be often kerplewy and yet a timeline I feel is findable here, despite its "stream of consciousness" memory base and weaving, flowing, flashback strategy):
1968 Nixon elected
1972 Nixon-McGovern election (fifth grade)
1973-1974 Sixth grade
1974-1975 Seventh grade
1975-1976 Eighth grade
Hubert Humphrey is Minnesota, not mentioned in this story, but in its background.
Charles A. Lindbergh is also Minnesota and subject of a speculative (alternative) historical novel by Phillip Roth, The Plot Against America, 2004.
I attended Charles A. Lindbergh high school, renamed in 1981 to Hopkins High School.
Hubert H. Humphrey is the name of the charter terminal of the MSP airport. Charles A. Lindbergh was (is?) the name of the main terminal at MSP, changed a year ago or so on outdoor signs to Terminal 1 and 2.
No airport named after Jesse Ventura yet.
Hans Alwin was homecoming king. (I may have given him a coronation complex.) My friends were international students (17 of them) and American students who went abroad to Israel, Belgium, and Mexico senior year. Eli Shochat was my first beau (of two) in high school, and he lived with his Israeli family not far from Ridgedale shopping center in Minnetonka. He wore army fatigues and boots to school. I recently shared that story (in fuller detail) with a friend. I explained my choice of Eli as non-political. He was cute, I said, and my father (WWII U.S. Army reservist) liked it that Eli had a cause. (See story, how my father felt about Mike.) I saw Eli's brother at the 20th high school reunion, and he said Eli has been in the Israeli Army all these years and has a family in Israel. Hans Alwin was there, and his very dark, etched beard and mustache, starkly drawn, scared me a little when the grade school class posed for a group photo.
Eli has moved to Vegas, Google reports.
I like how you are able to capture that feeling of one thought streaming off into another with almost a random feel and yet keeping moving forward. And such a strng close.
Thanks for your comment on "Paradise" about the specificity making it "pop."
Thanks, Ginnah!
Subtle wonderfulness, Ann. I love it.