Appointment
by Shelagh Power-Chopra
He went for his usual appointment with Lin, but she wasn't there. Gone off her rocker, said her colleague, Suyin, a catty woman who chewed ginger and specialized in perms. Lin had been cutting his hair for months now, he found her shop one day when his own barber was shut. It was a simple place—hard pink chairs, no magazines and one potted plant. His hair was limp and a mousy brown but she never made him feel bad. She cut his bangs with such precision it was as if she held an imaginary ruler against his forehead. And she didn't talk much, always smiling—once she told him he had good features, you have devil eyes, she said mischievously as she rubbed mousse in his hair. He loved to watch her move—so willowy and ethereal like a living ghost. He often thought of asking her out—they'd go to some little Italian hole in the wall, read Mallarme together and later she'd lie naked on his plaid sofa as she trimmed his moustache. Lin real upset, she run out of here like fire, Suyin said as she clipped away, nicking his neck. He closed his eyes, listened as she sucked the ginger—a waterfall in his ears. Got a phone call, neighbor found her husband hung up in the closet, love of her life, I hear. He stared at the mirror, his hair looked chewed up—severed by a miniature lawnmower. Okay, we done here, Suyin said, holding out her hand for a tip.
OK we done here. Good story in a small package. Ecstasy and agony. Tight description. Very evocative. I've had a haircut here.
Hysterical. I too love the last line. Might want to make an edit: "She cut his bangs with such precision it was if she held an imaginary ruler against his forehead." Change to "as if". Loved this story, fave.
Larry, appreciate your kind comments!
Thank you, Roberto. The last line was a fluke, not sure where it came from but it seems to work!
Great story. Powerful stuff. Unique story, and the ending brilliant. Fave.
Thanks so much, Jack!
Wow, this is great, Shelagh. Very very well done. The one paragraph structure works perfectly here. Great details and the ending is just right. Fave.
Kathy, thank you, you're too kind. Might still tweak it a bit, tempted to...
I'm a firm believer in tweaking. I still go back and mess with things I wrote years ago.
It's great that it's all about the hair with this guy( She'll trim his moustache!) and a haircut is how he gets his.Great originality as always.
Thank you David! It's always about the hair, didn't you know that?
bad haircut, great piece! Every line here combed into perfect place! *
Thanks, I always appreciate your comments, Julie!
Like this. Look forward to more from you.
Yep, this is just great! You gotta come around more often, girl!
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Thanks so much, Michelle and Matthew!
Great take on the theme and wonderful execution. Like it a lot. Face.
Enjoyable read; A Day in The Life vignette. I wonder if haircutters realize how close they are to the customer's ear. This phrase brought forth a snort: ". . . as she sucked the ginger—a waterfall in his ears." Now that's funny!
Thanks, Kim & Ramon...!