1985...What I wanted
by Rene Foran
i waited for
with cool confidence
and mirror practiced
believable body language
i wanted you
to want me
to tell you
what you wanted
what i wanted
were the wings
sprung
from the sound
of register rings
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What I wanted 1985
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I like it, just like the way it sounds and the feeling it conveys.
Me too.
Me three. *
I'd like to join the club, as well.
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Susan, James, Boudreau and Erin
Thank you!
You know I now live for this, right?
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Oh, this is very good, wonderful image in last stanza
Christian, Susan...thank you so much.
Great poem: strong voice, clear imagery and sound, musical rhythm and flow, with emotional overtones. I'm not a poet but I know it when you show it.
Nice work, Rene. Enjoyed the read.
J. Mykell, Sam...I am glad you both enjoyed the read.
I'm definitely digging this and the feelings it conveys, especially the last stanza.
If you like your love stories short--I do--this is a doozy! And bingo--the final image anchors it all in place. *