by Matt Potter
Packing it was like playing tetris. One thing on top of another, building layers, my multi-coloured life seen through the large windows of a 35-seater bus.
“It's not working,” Veronica said. “There's no way we'll make the emergency evacuation queue in time, Dad.”
I studied her fifteen-year old face, seeing nothing similar between us. She looks just like her mother, I thought, whoever the anonymous egg donor was.
“That's very obsessive compulsive gay,” she added. “You can't take a chandelier on an emergency dash across a nuclear desert.”
Ah, but her eloquence! That she gets from me.
The back door slammed as Marvin stepped outside.
“Dad wants to pack a chandelier in the event of a nuclear attack,” Veronica said. “It's ridiculous.”
“Could it be used for something besides providing an elegant setting for dining?” Marvin asked, stroking his beard. “Multi-purpose objects should be given a chance to prove their manifold uses.”
Veronica threw her hands in the air. “Neither of you are taking this seriously,” she said. “You think it's a joke.”
She walked away and stood against the fence post, arms folded, scowling. My heart thumped in my chest. Times like this I truly loved her, her grumpy teenage face a life force.
I walked over and put my arms around her. “What do you want me to take out?” I said softly.
She leaned into my shoulder. “Those caftans for a start,” she said. “Except the white one. That could work well at a post-apocalyptic toga party.”
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Is it OK to like your own work? If it is, then I like this story a lot. So often funny also = mean, and sometimes funny = mawkish. But I like this story because it is both funny and warm. And writing and finishing it, it made me smile. The opening line came from a friend. She said a Canadian friend of hers had driven his bus from somewhere in France, and left it at her farm in Brandenburg. She told me that he'd said, "Packing it was like playing tetris." The rest is complete fiction, but I have to say that with the burgeoning rate of openly gay men having children, so too must the rate of openly gay men being proud of their children be burgeoning. This story was written for Week #23 of '52 / 250: A Year of Flash' (theme: Long Lines). Read on ...
What is it about those voices? Whatever it is you have it. Very cage aux folles in a flash kind of way.
I liked this, Matt, a lot. The tenderness between the man and his daughter, the flotsam and jetsam of a chandelier, caftans, and a packed-in bus, the debate about what to take, the debate about whether beauty is an "essential." -- Q
Fantastic. Great dialogue. Fun, funny and yes, warm. *
Enjoyed reading this piece, Matt. Nice work.
When the apocalypse comes, I want to be on this bus!
Fun and tender at the same time. Great story, Matt! *