The garbage bag bumps behind you through the glass-strewn median. You startle when the 18-wheeler barrels past. A cigarette spatters orange on the pavement.
“Cochinos.” You stab a soggy diaper. “Pigs. All Americanos.”
The watch you found last week shines Indy-Glo green. Two more hours, no more breaks. Rats stare at you, their eyes fearless pinpricks, but you reach around them for the Corona empties, the crumpled McDonald's bags, and wait for dawn to spill, a broken yolk across the desert.
You scrape crushed rabbit from the asphalt, gagging at the smell. Dead animals still get to you, haunting your dreams. Those nights Simona soothes you, reminds you of Spring, when you can quit and pick berries in the valley, then asparagus, almond, and, when the baby comes, grapes. Sometimes you curse yourself for listening to her, for leaving La Paz, but she wanted a better life for the child. It's not her fault construction dried up.
Orange flecks the clouds. The cool breeze reminds you of the Coromuel winds, and you try to thank God for this job, but you can't. You can only pray for this shift to end.
You hear the thrum of blowflies before you see the white-swaddled object, larger than the rabbit; a dog, perhaps, or small coyote. At one end, a thatch of black. Your heart races even as your walk slows and somehow, you know, even before you reach down to unwrap the sheet, expose the face, you will never again pick trash on a highway.
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My rather gruesome take on this week's 52/250 theme: busy at work. Inspired also by a long drive which got me to wondering: who cleans our highways?
"...wait for dawn to spill, a broken yolk across the desert."
Yah. I see it.
Stark, this one, a bit of a heartbreaker.
the voice is so good here, and the setting, it pulled me in immediately and provoked a kind of despair for these people forced to live this way due to circumstances beyond their control such as where they were born, the poverty born into, the uncaring world they try and scratch into--
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Oh... 'wait for dawn to spill, a broken yolk across the desert' is a stunning line.
James and Martha, you like that line? Sunrise is like that in the desert. Thanks so much for the reads and generous comments.
Susan, yes. Exactly everything you say. That is what I wanted to get across. Thank you for reading and your wonderful comment. peace...
Some people put up walls. Others rip them down. Thank God for writers who make us feel the hardship, the shared pain. A star in the West for this one.
Quite exquisite, Linda. There’s a nice blend here of the beautiful and the awful in this, and it’s done so smoothly.
Jack, thank you - your comment made my week. peace...
Thank you so much for your generous comments, Christian. It means so much to me when you read my words. peace...
You know how much I love this, Linda. Just drips with beauty and pain. You have such control of the language. The visit to the past is wonderfully done.
Thank you lovely Lou! Your generous comment means a lot to me. Peace...
Really like this one.
Matt, thanks for the 2nd read and the pretty star :^) Peace...
Such striking imagery, love the little details of cigarettes turning orange, soggy diapers, crushed rabbit! So sad but lovely as well in language alone. What an ending.
Linda - Ditto Shelagh comments. I like the building dread and the cul de sac he must escape. It deserves the favs and mine. Thank you for a great read.
Shelaugh -- thanks so much for the read and star! I appreciate so much. peace...
Martin, ditto what I said to Shelagh ;^) Glad you enjoyed. Peace...
Such an effective use of second person (usually second person annoys me, I love it when it really works). Well done.
Maggie, thanks so much for reading. I haven't written in 2nd before, and I felt this story was a good exercise for that POV. So your comment makes me do a happy dance! Peace...
Sunrise 'a broken yolk across the desert' really stood out for me too. Completely wonderful line.
Really strong writing. For some reason it put me in mind of Animal Dreams by Barbara Kingsolver. The setting, maybe.
A cigarette spatters orange on the pavement...love what's going on here linguistically... you try to thank God for this job, but you can't. You can only pray for this shift to end.Great stuff.
DP, thank you so much for the huge comment and fav -- I love when you read my words. Peace...
The language choices here get my creative blood racing.
"reminds you of Spring, when you can quit and pick berries in the valley, then asparagus, almond, and, when the baby comes, grapes."
Fav. Fav. Fav!
Bill, you so have me smiling. Love that this gets your blood racing. I'd like to fav your comment! Peace...