Flags rippled in the faint evening breeze. In the dim light of the just-set sun, the plot gleamed with a newly-buffed sheen. People moved with reverence among the flags. Except for the children, who ran with yelps of laughter. Eugene Kosinksi looked down from his bunting-draped platform and grimaced, worried about the kids ruining the refined ambience he had worked so hard to create. He worried whether too many people would visit, worried not enough would come. Most of all, he worried he had given away too much. No, no… tonight was the least he could do. The dark deepened. He reached for his cell phone. Now.
The three spotlights flicked on. The huge flag hoisted up the pole, America the Beautiful thrummed the night. A large ooh wafted into the air. The crowd stood reverent, even the kids, hands held hearts, and gazed at the red and blue filling the field of night. The song ended with raucous applause. Eugene's chest swelled with pride as he observed his seven-acre empire of F-150s, Explorers, and Fiestas glittering under the light beams criss-crossing the sky. Just wait until the free hotdogs, he thought and rubbed his hands together. Just wait until the balloon launch.
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My wee contribution to the Flag Day Challenge.
Enjoyed this piece, Linda. The detail of the moment.
Thanks Sam, I appreciate your read. Peace...
Nice, Linda. I loved the details in the second paragraph.
And I just faved your 0 Fav piece. Sorry, I think?
Thanks Christian! For the read and the fave! Peace...
Loved this one on your blog, and it remains good here. Yay hotdogs!
"Just wait until the free hotdogs, he thought and rubbed his hands together. Just wait until the balloon launch." - These lines were the perfect way to end this story. It makes me wonder if he's looking forward to them, or using them as an opportunity to sell cars.
John, thanks for your kind words. As always appreciated!
Kevin, also thank you -- especially for running this challenge! Yes, yes.. to sell cars. Isn't that what America stands for these days? To turn a buck? peace...
Nice story. I especially enjoyed the last two lines.
2 favs - bye,bye - oust!
Sweetly funny story of a slightly neurotic compulsive man seeking perfection where he is involved. Great work here, Linda
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Thanks Susan! I had fun writing this story, lighter than my usual doom and gloom. Peace...
Yes, the details here are what make this piece so tight. Very good stuff, the swelling pride, the one moment in this man's life -- not knowing anything else about him except what we glimpse here (which it turns out is quite a lot). Love this kind of flash.