Julie in 2004
by John Riley
Outside the lakeside bar, the summer of 1957, she leans against the brick wall, one arm across the body that brings her so much trouble, her back to the door, cigarette in hand. Not yet full evening, she watches as the pelicans dip and circle and make headlong dives into the lake. It's the first body of freshwater west of the ocean and she wonders if each pelican makes a decision which they prefer, saltwater fish or the killifish and crappies scooped out of the lake. She knows they fish the closest body of water, but likes to imagine a fickle pelican flying in circles while deciding what to have for supper. One pelican looks pretty much like the other. Brown and beige with gold eyes and beaks that should be too long for their bodies. They seem to travel in groups but their coming and going is a thread that hides its end.
Inside the bar sits a man with a navy tattoo on his arm and while waiting for him to take her home she thinks about the newsreel she saw the night before when he took her to the Carolina Theater. We'll make it a real date, he'd joked. I'll even buy you a pop. When he smiled she thought about caverns, in the West, where dry birds sit on cliffs. The newsreel was about the future. In 2004 robots of all different sizes and shapes will do most of the work, leaving people plenty of free time to enjoy with their friends and family. Medicines will cure most diseases, and there will be flying cars. It's hard for her to imagine a sky filled with little flying cars. She'll probably be dead by then, but if her old body held up and her mind was still good she'd give flying one a try. She doubts the cars will be able to fly like the pelicans, in wide looping arcs and effortless soars, and the crosswinds that blew in from the Atlantic will make for a bumpy ride. She'd have to be careful, but couldn't you just see it? Her wrinkled and gray, most likely a widow, holding on to the little car's yoke, flying alone, aimlessly, satisfied. No one to bother her, no one to notice her, no more future forcing her forward.
**Just right.
Beautiful use of words, John. Each image a delight.
Many great phrases, ideas and visuals here. The one that REALLY got my attention: "They seem to travel in groups but their coming and going is a thread that hides its end." *
hell's bells you can write. *
Thanks for reading guys. Thrilled you like it.
This is amazing.
*, John. I like how you sketched the pelicans into the story.
Thank you Gary & David
"no more future forcing her forward."
Great end, John.
Perfect.*
This line is perfect: "They seem to travel in groups but their coming and going is a thread that hides its end."
and i love the last line:
"No one to bother her, no one to notice her, no more future forcing her forward."
Late to the party, but John this wonderful work. Such a quiet, lovely picture.*
Thank you guys. I've been in and out around here myself.
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Thanks Sam
What Steven G. said. ***
Thanks, Rachna
I'm still waiting for 2004! Deft and light, but hits all the right notes.
life is made of moments like these but not everyone can tell a story about them so poignantly. Beautiful writing. *
Thanks Kathryn and Charlotte.
Nice. Two packed-tight paragraphs. Worth the trip! *.
Thanks, Smiley
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