some apples
some raisins
some chicken
and peas
some coffee
cigarettes
cinnamon
please
eggs and
bananas
guava juice
cream
lettuce
tomatoes
and doesn't
it seem
absurd to
be writing
a list just
for one
without
a short note
at the end
when it's done?
like, "bring me
a present."
or "hurry
back home."
"i love you."
"i miss you."
or maybe,
a poem
toothpaste
some razors
light bulbs
and oil.
chorizo
some tacos
some seafood
to broil
some soap
with a scent
reminiscent
of pine
some sugar
some cocoa
two bottles
of wine
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Hey, this is awesome, James. *
A slender thread with great density and tensile strength.
Good one!
Love the rhythm of this. And lot to read between the lines. Very skillfully done James *
I fell in love with the word "please" here. *
Thanks, everyone. Simplicity is the essence of love, whether it's present or missed.
I seem to remember this. I remember liking it before, and I still like it now. Nice work, James.
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My wife adds: "And hurry it up, asshole." *
I love this, I smiled all the way through.
I enjoyed this, James. It made me smile.
Good flow, James -
"and doesn't
it seem
absurd to
be writing
a list just
for one
without
a short note
at the end
when it's done?"
Especially like the imagery of the closing lines. *
Simple is more complex than it seems. This was an emotional piece, written in a difficult time for me, but when I read it again, the feel of it was so much different than it seemed when I wrote it.
Thanks everyone.
I'm a sucker for a rhyme.
Love how this all comes together. *
Thanks, Steven and Christian.
A very moving piece, very well written. Sad. *
Love lists, I love rhymes too, especially when the resulting poem is less like a waterfall and more like a sharp stick to pick up a grain that one sees on the ground, a piece of matter that wanted to be found.
and one more thing...
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Thank you, Foster, Marcus, Rene.
I always like to add luck to my grocery list. :)
Nice. Love the devolve into rhyme.
First poetry I've read by you, James. I think you should write some more. It's really good.
Coolio. Bring me a present. Reminds me of being a kid, waiting.
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I love this one. It has an internal rhyme as well...It could be a song.
Excellent. I just tweeted this.
James, this reminds me with a nudge, how we tend to dismiss the beauty of the ordinary and everyday...and for some reason brings dear henry M to mind. It's deceptively touching. 'Nice' one; (more than)
Thank you, Amantine... and it is personal, triggered by recollections in that vein.