It looked like you, but it wasn't. It was kind of freaky, actually. I mean, the hair was the same, the face, the body. But something was different. Your eyes, they hardly settled on me throughout the day. By noon, I felt invisible. I thought at first it was something I was saying or doing, so I tried to say something different, do something different. Nothing worked. You were in the zone. One that didn't include me.
I never felt any overt hostility or anger, or anything like that. Just this strange disconnect. Do you know what I mean? Have I ever made you feel like that, darling? As though you weren't really there? It's quite disconcerting, actually.
But here's the cool part. I decided that since I couldn't put my finger on anything that I had done, that it had nothing to do with me. You were on a trip without me. And sure enough, today you told me you loved me and missed me. And couldn't wait to see me again.
The next time I see you, I'm going to pretend you're a stranger, and that I'm meeting you for the first time. And you can be sure that I'm going to give you everything that I would give to someone I'm really trying to impress, because I want to make sure you come back for more. Is this what happens? Is this how love stays alive?
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This is a piece of flash fiction in response to a prompt from Flash Fiction Highway, a new project founded by Meg Pokrass and Lillian Ann Slugocki.
https://www.facebook.com/pages/Flash-Fiction-Highway/578055995566262
Here's the scoop:
Writing Prompt (a) for Flash Fiction Highway.
A line from the film, Lost Highway:
"It looked like you, but it wasn’t."
Include this in a 250 word memoir.
Nifty story, expertly written. Big fav.
Love this!
Well crafted.
I envy you this line: "By noon, I felt invisible." Brilliant. *
heh. it's funny how much we approach relationships from the default position "this is about me"
Thanks for all the comments, everyone. I always appreciate seeing the points of connection between our writer brains!
This is a nifty write, liked it a bunch! *
Enjoyed this!
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(You don't really need that last line. IMO, ends stronger on the question.)
[Tense shift at end of paragraph #3.)
Thank you Brenda!
And thanks, Bill, for the comments. I like your suggestions, and have implemented them...
#editing
*, Deborah. Well-written.