I gave a speech about how I wanted to sit down with people of different cultures, how we would talk and dine, sing and dance, knowing it's impossible. I burned up in the atmosphere, my body plunging from orbit, becoming consumed by flame as it fell through different layers of atmosphere. I wrote on my arms the names of prophets, my own philosophy, the violence that is every eye blink. I walked the walk of the walkers. I ate a novel. I digested a film reel. I vomited poetry. I bound myself in tape, becoming a clear mummy, still alive, my brain and organs still housed in their appropriate cavities. I called your name, wanting more. I screamed your name, my voice the blast of Krakatoa, full of selfish killing noise. I wrote an essay on how the world is broken people. I cut my flesh into geographies so everyone would see my version of the world. I cried for everyone who died before they should have. I righted all wrongs yet still everything was wrong. I walked through your front door even though you didn't invite me. I was dead beyond dead. I listened to the music of broken shells. I let the ocean wash over me, scrub me clean with its abrasives. I found that book in the infinite library, the one you thought could never be written. I rewrote my role, moving from shadows to spotlight to shadows once more. I erased myself, again and again.
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Written for week #45 of the 52/250 challenge. The theme/prompt is “broken shells.”
Not sure exactly what this is but it is what this is nonetheless.
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I'm not sure what it is, either, Christian, but that it's complete in itself, says something real, and makes the space for itself that says simply "I am" is enough to call it art in my mind. I liked it.
Whatever it is, it works for me. Favorite.
You should write this down in the bosom of a (clean) scallop shell and send it immediately to the Brautigan Library at 1511 Main Street, Vancouver, Washington 98660 where it will be all watched over by machines of loving grace.
Really like the voice, Christian. The forceful "I" is effective here. Nice work.
This is really cool. I like it. I appreciate your willingness, always, to stretch, explore different voices and forms. *
Thanks, Sam, Misti, David, and James (a comment with a mailing address--that's got to be among the best ever)!
Thanks, Kathy!
I like this, Christian. It has a voice crying out in pain amid the movement.
I agree; it is what is. And that ain't bad. Different, but somehow very familiar. Fav.
I like the space this piece addresses itself to and its own logic, and how this narrator is angry at the monstrous stupidity and violence of this world.
Thanks, Susan, Jack, and David!
This says so much. I need to read it again and then maybe more to take it all in.
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The I verb, I verb, I verb--it's a great pattern you've got going here. It really works, makes this piece hum.
I agree, I concur, I feel empowered by your creative juices spilling forth, I'm amazed. *
Thanks, Susan, Meg, Jon, and Robert!
I'll tell you what this is, Charlie Brown--it's a fine piece of writing, and pure poetry. Wonderful.
Here I was expecting some homage to Dune, but got this instead.
Thank goodness.
I love the comparison between screaming the name and the volcano--powerful imagery.
it's good, this is what this is. " I ate a novel. I digested a film reel." holy jesus.
Thanks, Darryl, Erin, and Marcus!
OH, YEAH!!!
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yes *
The "I"s have it!
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Thanks, Susan, Meg, and Bill!
And there it is. *
It's brilliant is what it is, Christian!! **********
"I ate a novel. I digested a film reel. I vomited poetry. I bound myself in tape, becoming a clear mummy, still alive, my brain and organs still housed in their appropriate cavities."It's mesmorizing!!!
what is it?
it's it.
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it's in your face
but you can't grab it :)
Extremely satisfying story, Christian.
"I erased myself, again and again." So well and beautifully said. I feel that pain. *
Thanks, Kari, Meg, Rene, Foster, and Kim!
Excellent tone and rhythm. The first sentence sets up a certain expectation and then falling in flames, unexpected, and I was hooked. Pathos edged with irony and delusion. Mocking yet never insulting. Really nice, Christian, really nice.
Thanks, Derek!
Holy jeebus, Christian, this is ah-mazing. Seriously wonderful. I'll come back and back to this.
(Also, that poetry is vomited is of course perfect)
Thanks, Lou!
Clear mummy. I dig it.
A seriously belated thanks, Alex!
Christian, this is just wonderful; it reads so seamlessly and beautifully towards its powerful end.