It is said they met in autumn, with the shadows at drowsy angles, in the clearing where the field sloped steeply towards the hidden creek. She caught his eye in the curious light, kneeling in the clover, thick curls hooked behind one ear. Perhaps it was the gentle way she clipped the roses that made him want to know her, who she was, how she thought. He approached her, bashful, grinning, buttoning and unbuttoning his jacket, blunt-nailed fingers fumbling slits. A glance of sideways approval and he was smitten. He received her smile like a gift.
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In spring they wed beneath the petal trestle. She gave him a paintbrush with squint coral pigments. He gave her a drainpipe and a tarnished gong. At home she managed book and leger, kept the teapot full. He worked on conduit and woodpile, hollowed pits for seedlings in their broad backyard. Winters came with heavy footsteps. Summers lingered, long in stride. Twenty years his senior, he knew one day she'd leave him, as all breathing things will do.
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It is said the day she died the clocks ran backwards. Starlings wrestled with their warbles. The skies filled but gave no rain. Decades later, some say that you can see him at the window, a silhouette of shadows, searching for her in the hinged wing of the sparrow, in the twisted branches of the cypress tree. He is there, forever watching, waiting for the seasons to cycle back around again.
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Carved from a larger wip I'm trying to get back into.
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Appeared in Dec/Jan issue of Flash Frontier
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lovely.*
Yes, this is wonderful and sad. *
I particularly like the "In spring they wed..." section.
This is a lovely fable. I can imagine it accompanied by woodcut drawings.
I love the detachment created by the passive voice. It gives this a floating, translucent quality. Well done. *
Wish I'd written these lines -
"It is said the day she died the clocks ran backwards. Starlings wrestled with their warbles. The skies filled but gave no rain."
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Lxx
"At home she managed book and leger, kept the teapot full. He worked on conduit and woodpile, hollowed pits for seedlings in their broad backyard." Such a dream-like quality to this,sad and beautiful.*
Sad, sweet, musical.
Utterly lush. •
•? I mean *.
Touched me, it did.
I heard distant violin strains while reading this. They linger still. *
Thanks all, for the great comments.
The larger piece this was taken from has a much different energy and intensity.
Time to get back into it!
I loved the march of these images:
squint coral pigments
a drainpipe and a tarnished gong
book and leger
conduit and woodpile
Awesome. *
Hey, thanks. I just came across the last couple comments. Much appreciated.
Very good piece, Sally. Paragraph #2 is outstanding. Its opening line ("In spring they wed beneath the petal trestle.") wowed me. It is perfect.
beautiful.
I love the way you laid this out, the tone of the prose, the images you invoke...the overall feeling. A+
The starlings wrestling with their warbles closed the deal for me; the deal first layed out when she managed book and ledger. Hope you will post more of the piece this was snipped from, and that my favoriting will encourage you to do so.
Sadly beautiful, Sally. Or maybe just beautiful in its affirmations. And in its poetic prose.
The language and imagery are beautiful... Rich... And it’s a ghost story too.
Beautiful, haunting, mysterious story, great language and imagery. Loved it. Fave *
Wow...beautifully written, gorgeously rendered, sweet and sad.... *
* Yes, that second para is a marvel.