I am tired, man, beat.
feel like a whiny kid,
are we there yet,
need to sleep!
Don't know if I can walk
another mile, though you might talk
me into it. 'Cause though I'm
stomped and scuffed,
and have wrinkles and pocks,
you say they're not wrinkles,
but creases and folds —
you say I have character,
you say I'm not old.
You caress me,
hold me and stroke
the soft spots between my folds.
I love how you touch me,
your hands warm on my shape,
and I know we are bonded
by more than duct tape.
Remember that dog shit?
And the chewing gum?
It's a hazardous world, but you, old chum,
scraped and washed me clean of all
those insults, every single time.
Then came the thinning —
your hair, my sole.
We're well suited, you and I —
Together, we're whole.
And though you toss me
in the corner each night,
I feel a surge of affection
the next morning
as you pick me up gently again,
choose me over the Adidas, the Nikes,
and even those Florsheims
that your mother once bought,
back when you were jobhunting.
You look right past them,
once shiny and loud
now dusty with disuse.
I wait quietly and think,
I am here for you.
We're both thinner, older,
greyer, slower,
but you are still you
and I am The Doctor.
And I feel it deep down,
you never say it but I know:
I am not just any old loafer.
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written for the 52|250 challenge "fancy me"
inspired in part by Melissa McEwen's Nettie's Purse, and also by a poem my brother wrote a long time back about his cowboy boots
I love the rhyme in this, Michelle and the revelation at the end! Good, clever work!
Great form. I like the music of the lines in this, Michelle. As in: "It's a hazardous world, but you, old chum,
scraped and washed me clean of all
those insults, every single time.
Then came the thinning —
your hair, my sole."
I can see its connection to Melissa's short story. Enjoyed your work.
"I love my shirt, I love my shirt. My shirt is so comfortably lovely." Donavan
Affection for old clothes may be common. I've never thought it the other way 'round. Delightful, this.
Michelle, capturing the person in the story is the challenge, you say. You captured this person exceptionally well. Enjoyed reading it.
Excellent form. Love the voice in this poem.
Thanks for the comment on rhyme, Myra. I always find that hard - sometimes it works, sometimes not. In the end, I try not to force it, but I never know if I succeed... This started in paragraph form, then I fit the words together differently...
And thanks, Sam, for your close reading and comment on music - I am glad that line spoke to you. Yeah, that piece by Melissa is something!
Thanks also, JLD, JMC, and Christian!
And on top of those comments, a quote from Donovan!
What lovely company for me this morning.
Nice poem and creative use of the prompt. Best line for me:
"We're both thinner, older,
greyer, slower,"
Very musical, a great country western song, and I say that as a compliment. Oh man, those boots we love! Some wonderful lines in here!
Just looking for a poem this Sunday morning -- found it here! A friend of mine years ago wrote a poem: THE POET APOLOGIZES TO HIS SHOES. He had the title right; you have the content right. Seriously, this is the best in the genre of The Poet's Shoes that I've read in at least that many years! Thanks for posting and this goes on my favorites list.