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I've grown enamored of microfiction -- a chance to drop a tiny little grenade of content into someone else's brain -- and this is one of (what I consider) my early successes. The older I get, the more I appreciate the breadth of my life experience, as it's given me much better dramatic grist from which to draw.
Ha! Enjoyed it. Never thought about that, before, things jumping from your hands to the floor below!
Thank you. I hope a touch of anthropomorphism can both introduce a little wonder and maybe let us know that some of this really doesn't matter all that much. Or I could be a pretentious shmuck. Hard to tell some days. Thanks either way!
simply superb. the first story that made me sympathize with well-washed dishes.
This is richly inventive. Great stuff.
Brilliant insight into the mind of a dish. Nice!
I liked this a lot! Seems I owe my stoneware an apology. I hope it's not too late.
Thanks to all! More today, I guess ...
Very deep. Peering into the mind of the inanimate object. Very clever storytelling.
I love this. Sorry I can't offer anything more profound than this.
wonderful perspective on the mundane - i also deeply appreciated your author's note. a great luvsong that prufrocks!
It seems that the mix of specific details (99 cent dishwashing liquid, twelve hour shifts) and the metaphor or abstract thought (washed too often, the dishes were just tired) or the blend of both (endless cycle of hot water, endless chatter of money that wasn't there, singing mournful songs over wash water) that makes this story so successful. P.S. I think many/most/all of us can relate to being caught in "an endless cycle of hot water" :) Nicely done.
"The dishes hated the endless chatter" [about money that wasn't there] is a great line because the washers chatter but the dishes "chatter," too. It seems the place in this suprising story where the metaphor most meets. Star.
The dishes hated the endless chatter about money
love this line!