When we were very young, we didn't tell because we didn't know any better.
Now we are six, and we don't tell because no one has believed us since we told the story about the vampire upstairs.
Now we're twelve, and we don't tell because our family's weird enough, living in an apartment instead of a house.
Now we're sixteen, and we don't tell because if it happens at home, why wouldn't it happen in our boyfriend's car?
Now we're twenty, and we don't tell because we've held too many friends' hands in the ER. We know how the cops treat rape.
Now we're thirty, and we don't tell because it's easier to write.
Now we're forty, and we don't tell because no one wants to hear about it anymore.
Now we're fifty, and we don't tell because we'd rather climb to the top of Mt. St. Helens, or what remains of it.
Now we're sixty, and the sunset is neither russet nor gold, but the shadows of dead trees are lovely tonight.
Now we're seventy, waiting for the stars to appear.
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This piece was written in response to 52|250 prompt 21, "unseen".
oh Eliza-Kate, there is much here to love and admire. The form, the content - entwined. *
A really nice form here. Great progression. Good piece for the challenge. Enjoyed the read.
amazing work. A perfect List poem, or whatever it is - it is stunning. Favorite.
The progression is both expected--by age--and unexpected by content. Cool piece.
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Really original take on the prompt. Heartbreaking.
Very good, the ending especially.
I found myself reading faster and faster as the story progressed with age. Love the form and flow. *
Like others have said, I love the progression of this. Simple and powerful. *
Just starting reading some Allen Ginsberg and this reminds me of it very much. Great job.
Cardinal issues. Write about cardinal issues, I was told. Elizabeth was listening. Fav.
Thanks for the comments, all. As for whether it's a list poem or something else, writing it felt like writing a story does, so in my head it's flash fiction, but you know YMMV.
This is really gorgeous: mysterious and real combined. Not easy to accomplish
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You are a damned good writer.
Cuts straight to the chase, and deep to the bone. *
Oh my. Yes, to this, for what it says and how it sounds to my ear. Great work. *
This is splendid writing.
Truly interesting read, Elizabeth. The "progress through the ages" form said some interesting things about the aging process in and of itself, I thought.
feels like a smack in the face - wonderful piece of writing!
Powerful way of illustrating this, a developmental passage.
The goods.
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I have lived it all..and "and we don't tell because it's easier to write"