—That was harsh, said Jen as the bathroom door slammed behind Melanie.
—Mel's my best friend, not yours. She needed to know that shade of blue doesn't go with olive skin.
—Viv, you said she looked like a whore.
—That's how our friendship works. Remember eighth grade when she warned me about my muffin top?
—You passed out in PE from not eating.
—Whatever. We're gonna be late for chemistry. Mel can find her own way there.
Melanie never made it to class. After twenty minutes, Mr. Schmidt asked if they'd seen her.
Jen denied it. Viv said she was probably with her boyfriend. Jen snickered. Melanie had only ever gone on one date, at Viv's urging, to dispel rumors of lesbianism.
After another twenty minutes, they heard ambulance sirens.
—Some goth must've cut her wrists too deep, Jen stage-whispered. Half the class laughed.
Ten minutes later came an announcement: the period would end early for an emergency staff meeting. Viv took advantage of the break to smoke a cigarette behind the school. When Viv sat down in study hall, Jen leaned over and said she was right about the wrists. —The senior hall bathroom's a fucking crime scene.
Ms. Lee came in five minutes late with red eyes. Jen had been wrong. It wasn't a goth.
Viv, sobbing, ran out of the room.
—So they really were dykes, whispered Jen, quietly so that only Viv's boyfriend could hear.
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written for 52|250 week 22: The Brutality of Friends
A horrible reality in our schools; you've nicely captured the trauma that teenagers inflict on each other.
And even faced with the reality of what happened... the nastiness doesn't stop, I liked that the ending kept it going story-wise. Nicely done Elizabeth.
Oh my. Reality on the page, well done. This is exactly how this story would end. Loved it. Fave.
Great form to the piece, Elizabeth. I like the voice - very direct...
"After another twenty minutes, they heard ambulance sirens.
—Some goth must've cut her wrists too deep, Jen stage-whispered. Half the class laughed."
Good work.
yeah to this, perfect form, really drew me in & it feels as if i've been privy to these discussions though that's not really possible so it must've been a dream and not a good one.
I like the narrative swagger.
Like Cherise, I love the cyclical nature of the ending --- Jen's reaction is chilling and I hope it would not happen in real life, but it takes the story to a new level.
Missed this first time 'round. Brutal it is ... in a friendly way.