Paris in the the Spring
by Bill Yarrow
he thought of her urgently
as one might recall
the occasion of a prayer
she thought of him absently
as one might recall
the color of a bus
he thought of her excitedly
as one might recall
the orange of a bird
she thought of him painfully
as one might recall
the stiffness of a joint
he thought of her longingly
as one might recall
the kindness of a bed
she thought of him fearfully
as one might recall
the onset of a storm
as one might recall
the occasion of a prayer
she thought of him absently
as one might recall
the color of a bus
he thought of her excitedly
as one might recall
the orange of a bird
she thought of him painfully
as one might recall
the stiffness of a joint
he thought of her longingly
as one might recall
the kindness of a bed
she thought of him fearfully
as one might recall
the onset of a storm
First poem I clicked this morning. Nice one.
Yes, good way to start the day, and good use of the much derided adverb.*
Stroke/counterstroke.
What Gary H. said. **
Gary H. nailed it.*
He ruined Paris for her.
Jerk.
*
Good use of constructive repetition.
Great back and forth. Has a body and soul feel. Nice one, Bill. *
Tennis match of heart and mind--40-love. *
Thank you, Neil, Gary P, Gary H, Rachna, Amanda, Rene, SDR, Sam, and Mathew!
Excellent, new, engaging and complete.
Thank you, Darryl!
*It's not often I laugh out loud when reading a poem. This is great.
Thanks, Nonnie!
Nice to read this gem here, Bill! Love Blasphemer!
Thanks, Robert! Glad to see you back!