Tilly Artaud
by Ann Bogle
NOTES: I spent one summer at my mother's house with a toad, an American toad, a female American toad, a Bufo Americanus, who visited each night at ten and left in the morning at six for twelve weeks; then she did not appear at her perch by the glass door for two weeks, a summer vacation.
"If you continue to come here," I said to the toad, "I'll have to buy a terrarium." At the word "terrarium" she crawled off into the night.
My life was quiet then, and that was my entertainment. I studied toads on the internet. The male toads have distinct voices. They call in mating. The females have little red gullets. Toads hibernate under the permafrost. No source seemed to know how long they live.
I reluctantly named her Tilly Artaud. She was free, not a pet. I could only train my cat, Francis, not to eat her if he knew she were a pet. Before the summer was over, I saw him pat her gently on the head.
Tilly appears in my short story "Dumb Luck" in a paragraph. I used it, but it's a longer story than that. Do I write it long form, as a creative nonfic? As a children's story?
I started on a children's story that turned lewd about frogs and turtles. The turtles were the landlords. The wife turtle drove a red Corvair. Her husband fetched six-packs of pop and beer from the country store for the frogs who were guests. He strapped the six-packs to his shell with a bungee cord. He went on foot, crossing the highway at a walking bridge. One day a car hit him, and the frogs didn't care that he was limping. The frogs were a very famous rock band staying at the lodge. Continue?
After not going out for weeks, I went to a bar and met an electrical engineer, a motorcyclist who raced in the Black Hills, a Renaissance man in a relationship with a young married woman, and I told him about the toad.
Please do!
Yes!
...Although, perhaps you were not posing a question at all, but writing some sort of experimental metafiction? One with a question at the end? A choose-your-own-adventure?
This could be, yet, a children's story, a story about religion, a horror story or a fable. Or all. Much fun.
Donald Barthelme ish.
Fave.
--But something is happening here and you dont know what it is.--(dylan)
star
Small revisions: Jan. 21, 4:15 a.m.
Comments appreciated. I've tried to write like DB before, but not while listening to Dylan. That works better. Tilly is to Tillie. Is it farfetched, a toad that tells time?
to answer your question about time-telling toads: no. if the first question is truly a question, then yes, please do continue.
This delights.
I like the function of questions here. That's great, Ann. And it's a wonderful piece. Really like the direct approach of the language:
"My life was quiet then, and that was my entertainment. I studied toads on the internet. The male toads have distinct voices. They call in mating. The females have little red gullets. Toads hibernate under the permafrost. No source seemed to know how long they live."
Very effective. Big like.
I, too, was in a famous rock band called The Frogs. Me and my brothers and a neighbor. It lasted about an hour, but what a career!
(one photo extant)
Strangely, I feel it could end with the last par. being, "After not going out for weeks, I went to a bar and met an electrical engineer, a motorcycle racer who raced in the Black Hills, a Renaissance man, in a relationship with a young married woman, and I told him about the toad." I love that as a last line... We learn so much about her from the way she studies this toad, and how thorough and careful she is.
I may be way off, but somehow this feels nearly perfect to me as a micro. There is something mysterious going on here and the man is like the frog who appears, and I like that not much more is said about it... hm.. anyway, just thoughts.
Ann,
I agree with Meg. Cut the first word; begin with "I spent...," end with "I told him about the toad." OR continue the story for a paragraph or two. I for one would like to know how the encounter with the EE turned out!
Continue? Absolutely! The story isn't over just because it's out of sight for the moment. There are curious readers awaiting the next chapter.
I think you should continue. Sonewhere Francis needs to know that frogs play in a R&R band. I'm sure he'll understand.
Meg & Jack Swenson, I tried moving the paragraph about the Renaissance man to the end; I see the point in doing that, but once in place, it affected the line up, even the mystery, so stet.
Jack Y., before the summer was over, Franny had patted Tilly on the head. I witnessed it. I added that.
Rev. Aug. 23, 2010, noon. I moved the paragraph about the electrical engineer to the end.
I like the whimsy and being included, if only rhetorically, with the questions.